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The huge peaks of the White Mountains were turning slowly orange with the setting sun, and the sky was changing colour from a light blue to an eerie, glowing pink. ...

Are you sure we dont know each other? This sounds an awful lot like my uncles house. Nevermind, family issues..... It was frightfully acurate. the one thing though is there ...

This is interesting. Some typos and i got confused with thoughts and dialouge. Cause you dont have any italics or quotations. A mjor deal that everyone will most likely tell ...

That was sweet!!! A priest who turns to the dark side and he is freakin sadistic! I love it. I totally get the characters and everything. I've only read the ...

I think it is beautiful. So heart felt. It expresses what needs to be expressed. I noticed you never applied a male or female tag to these two. At first ...

On the planet marcadus, there rages a never ending battle intertwined with the earth, our earth. The outcome of the war will determine the future of the earth but until ...

The girl watched, eyes wide in fear and awe as the creature descended on her. It was the most beautiful thing that she had ever seen, although terror clutched her ...

Pulling out his last phosphorescent grenade, he pulled the pin and buried it in the sand and ran. The grenade ignited, the intense heat causing the sand to turn to ...

Rain pelted the forest floor in huge dime sized drops . It was spring time in Scotland and the earth was sodden with rain. The wind buffeted the windows of ...

They constantly try to escape From the darkness outside and within By dreaming of systems so perfect that no one will need to be good . I like the beginning ...

Firstly, You have got to format thhis so it is easeier to read cause all the sentences cramped together like that is murder on my eyes. And i wanted to ...

This was nicely written Snoink. You playted the emtion without making it corney so good job. The onlything i didn't care for was the first paragraph. It didn't really grab ...

His duty was to never be completed. In his haze of blood loss and desire for the lady held beyond his reach by magic and stone, the dragon flew up ...

I get the sentiment and it's sweet but in order to really push the emotion and give it power ther are a few things i would suggest doing. Firstly read ...

The town was rather empty; the light was fading after a fresh, spring day. The street lamps were beginning to ignite, one by one they would come on, burning orange. ...