Alteran

It was a bit short. Whatever though. everyone's chapters are different. When the driver says he was starin' to think. It should be startin' It can confuse the reader cause ...

Wow. That was amazing. I can totally relate too. Very good descriptions. I like how you said unchanging like mountains and stairs cause it's kind of an oxymoron since Stars ...

Sweet. As corrupt as Raed was he was better than Jared as far as a person goes. Stupid Jared. Hopefully Tea and Eolen escape. One thing. Some of the things ...

Well. This was nice. It did get a little repetitive but you had a rhythm, but you broke it. You set it well and almost followed it the whole way ...

Casting sideways glances, longing for the electric chemistry , when at last eyes touch. Skin brushes against skin, r a ising hairs so fine, and longings so pure. Soul brushes ...

You are very interesting. I dont know. Not great with poetry but it sounds cool. I like how you did the thing with the where finger and freckle collide. Cool ...

The red rocky ground. The stars that seemed to go on for eternity. The sandy taste. Sets an interesting scene already. Lifeless. Everything about it. The atmosphere, [s]the air[/s] That ...

Umm...Your arguement is not strong at all. I mean i get your point but you have no chance of winning an arguement with this. And bad spelling weakens your arguement ...

Chapter 17 Quinn smiled as the man she’d been stalking walked past , totally oblivious too her existen[s]t[/s] ce . He was a well-primed individual with a definite air about ...

The First Bite Chapter 1 Skye Phantom was awake , but he didn’t open his eyes. He didn’t want to get up, didn’t want to move. His bed was too ...

Well, I'm not sure why this is in NaNoWriMo, since this is June not November. For now I'm moving it to Other Fiction. You can PM me if you want ...

Then all was still, the gushing blood[s]y[/s] slowing to a trickle. Very good! I only found the one typo. I love it. You did a very good job.(I really should ...

After the summer of 2004, my family, friends, and even I saw a big change in how I acted and my attitude toward everything. I used to be a shy, ...

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depressing. I dont know anything about poetry evoked an emotion. Sad. That's what I know :D I'm sure someone else will be along to crush you later.