AliceWonderland

Hello there! I'm from Wonderland, so I come from a place of insanity, but I'll do my best for your review. Why don't we get started while we can? His ...

Hey, I'm coming back from Wonderland for a little while to get my senses of sane reality back. Well, never mind that, I'm here for a review. Your second paragraph ...

Why hello there! I have just returned from a very hot day in Wonderland. There's no air-conditioning there, but the Mad Hatter poured me some lovely tea. I was almost ...

This is in paragraphs, just so you know, and you have it marked as poetry. Purpose? Yes? No? I've never heard of poetry in long paragraphs, before, so, uh, yeah. ...

Hello there! I'm in a rabbit hole right now, so communication doesn't work all the time, but it looks like it's working right now. I can't remember if I read ...

Why hello! They took a plane to Hazel Grove but that took 8 hours. There should be a comma before 'but.' When word came from Peru that my parents were ...

Her head pounded and her mouth throbbed, her throat was dry and she could taste the metallic tang of blood in her mouth. This feels like a run on sentence, ...

Welcome to Young Writers Society! Firstly, you seem to capitalize oddly, in middle of sentences where there's no need to capitalize. For example, "Oh How rude of me," I only ...

Well, hello there. I do like you profile picture a lot. It has a nice sketchbook feel to it. But your picture isn't what we're I'm here for, oh well. ...

There's only a few minors things that I caught. A few presses on the keyboard should fix it. For one, I would reword 'His mother screamed from the top of ...

1. Definitely had been spelled wrong on the third line down. 2. Instead of 'For year I'd think of all the ways I could have it all,' it could change ...

1. Make sure to be consistent when using tenses. The first paragraph starts out as present tense, and most of it is except for one sentence. The second to last ...

1. "Aidan…Aiden wake up!". That period at the end isn't necessary. Like in other places. You have unnecessary periods after the quotes 2. You can change another quote slightly by ...