Aley

So it is an interesting statement, that a pickle is like tears, never spoiled, very tasty, sad, and salty, but I'm getting caught up on some of the middle lines. ...

That second paragraph is just beautiful. Just as I regain fuller consciousness, lunch break is called, and the smoky van I once knew as my grandfather’s beckons, holding with it ...

I'm just going to do this real quick and then keep reading. Neither of them have I ever cared much for, nor I think they for I , yet I’ll ...

So as it seems jordin has already covered the hard stuff, I'm going to cover the less-hard stuff. The main thing is flashbacks. Personally I feel that flashbacks don't really ...

This poem is very confusing. First, we start out with light and dark being stacked on top of one another, which is confusing in itself, and then you continue to ...

" “Oh leave it, Bakar. I said. " - missing a quotation mark " “Good.” How much longer?” " - Found the missing quotation mark. I would like to see ...

I’m not sure what she thought I was going to do, but the fact of the matter was that I just wanted to be away from the house and I ...

This song is really cute. I like how your speaker changes from hating the mimes to loving them once they give up on actually being frustrated with them. I feel ...

Alright, so there are a few things I'd like to point out ^^ First, punctuation goes after the last letter of the last word. For instance: "Musicians have the desire ...

I'd like to see you break away from end line punctuation. There are some really cool things you can do with lines if you don't leave punctuation at the end ...

The light's flickers as I make my way down an empty corridor. Lights can be plural without an apostrophe. With the apostrophe they are possessing the flickering. The voices that ...

Wanting to reassure him she made a step but stopped herself, muttering no under her breath. To me, this doesn't make much sense. Mainly it is "She made a step" ...

Appearing at the close This really catches me off guard. The first time I read it, I had to stop and see if this was a fanfic poem for Harry ...

Why didn't the match burn up the poem? Just a simple question

I don't wish for much in this world. In fact, there's very few hopes that this So these two lines are something that are kind of overused. I'd really love ...