Aley

wonderfully brilliant, misguided, perfectly good waste of genius cabbie. "good-waist-of-a-genious cabby" because you're using it as one whole unit of description. So aside from what the other reviewer

Hey Tenyo, Aley here to review this. First thing first, I really like how conversational this is. It doesn't sound forced at all which is a huge step in the ...

Overall I think you captured the beat very well. You have a good ear for rhyme and I like that you really emphasized the two lines by not having rhyme ...

I'm not going to make this long. It's a really good poem. You capture a lot of aspects of the day very well. There are a few things I'd like ...

I like how this is a new approach to the phantom limb experience, and that you've incorporated a bit of scary fantasy into it instead of nice fantasy. This goes ...

This is probably something someone else on here has already said, so I'm going to keep it short. I see you've got a lot of reviews, but you haven't done ...

This poem has really good wording. I think you work very well within the metaphor you picked and that is a huge plus for what you're trying to do. The ...

Alright, a few quick tips for the general writing style. First thing first, most of the time commas are put at the end of the last word, with a space ...

This is very well written. You do a great job of summarizing everything up in one concise story. It doesn't need any more, if anything I'd suggest cutting things that ...

One of the reasons this is getting few reviews, my guess, is that it is super long. In an internet format like this, on YWS, we like to keep things ...

I'm jumping into this off the figurative street for this review. First thing I'd like to say is that the electric chair is not a very popular way of execution ...

Hello, I'm going to be a little more critical of your poem than your other two comments. The Good: I think you have a subject matter here which is going ...

I think you're writing is pretty much covered by Dragon Phoenix, so I'm not going to review that again, instead I'll do a broader story-line edit sort of thing. I ...

So I think Dragon got down to the brass tax of copy-editing, I'll try to do the other half. Overall this story is fine. It really gets into something that ...

Hello. I'm going to attempt to review this to help you create a document that you could include with Quantum Mind if it was published so that this can get ...