Aley

Hi Pinkie! I'd like to say that this is going to be rather... odd to review. I'm not used to reviewing profiles by critiquing them, but I'll give it a ...

Hello! Welcome to YWS XD I actually started working on this review when you had it all together, so there might be remnants of that. So let's get to it. ...

Dude! I love it XD. Honestly, that was one of the first poems in a while that really enthralled me completely and drew me into the story enough that I ...

Hey~ Aley here! I think you've done a good job at catching reality here. The sun and stars don't align when people are sad to make it rain. They don't ...

Hello~ I'd like to say that you have a very poetic way of wording things. That made this a smooth quick read which I really liked. I'd have to say ...

Hello Kanome~ First thing first I guess, I would like to say that I understand why you have end stops and line capitalization in this poem, but I'm not sure ...

This is a rather interesting poem. I like how you showed the idea that "I am a lion" without saying it. The idea that you're a violent person who is ...

Hello~ So overall I think you've got some good narrative detail in this poem. You don't just go through with metaphors to hide what's going on, but detail what she's ...

Hello~ I think the first thing I'd like to say is that this is a topic I've pondered over before. It's highly relate-able to a lot of people I think, ...

Hello Renard~ First thing first, I'd like to show you this: because it can help with getting the stanzas right. I think that you've got a good sense of imagery ...

Hello~ I think this might be better with punctuation. It's a rather cold calculated poem. The first stanza is either preparing the self harm, or having self harm happen, so ...

Hello PercyBeth~ I don't know if I've reviewed you before or not, so here I am. I really like the overall shape of this poem. It's really interesting how you ...

Hello~ I don't normally review chapters, I tend to nitpick which isn't really needed. I'll try to stick with the overall stuff that should be cleaned up in the next ...

Hey Writing Wolf So first admission on my part before we get into the review, I'm not one much for heaven and the whole "your sacrifice was not in vein" ...

Hello~ You say leave constructive criticism so here I am