Aley

Hello Teacake013! Welcome to YWS! I like what you have here. I think you've got a good way with rhyme and it's not overly obvious or poorly done. On the ...

Hey Inked! I think what you're trying to do with this poem is really courageous. You're trying to portray the difference between reality and hollywood, but I think in a ...

Hey! So first thing first, one is the number, on is the preposition like put the cup on the table. Death brings on a lot of change is probably what ...

Hey Gladergrande! This is a really creative piece. I was expecting it to be less creative with how short it is but I really like the ending because it reminds ...

Hello! So overall I didn't really like this. I do like that you have some tension build up through the poem. You do a good job with keeping suspense going ...

Hey Epic! I think your poem really has quite a lot of nice qualities about it. You're using language well to get across what you want to say and while ...

Hey Per- uh Hey Pocket! So I'm not exactly sure what sort of effect you were going for with this but it definitely grossed me out. I think you did ...

Hi Yubbies, I'm not really sure if this is supposed to be taken completely seriously as a poem or not. The reason I have a problem with it as a ...

Hello QuentintheSad! I had to look up two things to read this poem and actually understand it, but I'm not well versed in religious mythology or the French Revolution. Honestly, ...

Hey PheonixXader! First off I'd like to say that you've definitely got the right content for a powerful poem. You're dealing with an issue that is very close to a ...

Hey Alfalfa, This poem has a really good rhythm to it. You've developed that very well and even with the enjambment, there is still the rhythm which is almost mimicking ...

Hello CristopherGarcia! Welcome to YWS. My name's Aley and I'll be reviewing your poem today. First off I'd like to echo what the others have said, it's very unique and ...

Hello! My name's Aley, and I'm here to critique your art. I'd like to start by saying that I really love how free you feel with the darks and the ...

Hello DavidFeelsterWallace, First, I'd like to say welcome to YWS. Next, time to get into the review. So starting out I wasn't quite sure what this was going to be ...

Hello Monsters, First off I'd like to say that my first impressions of your poem were not that favorable. It wasn't that clear for me as a reader, and perhaps ...