Alainna

Heya!! Ok, I want to say that I thought that piece was beautiful. It was filled with description that made it almost poetic. The voice continued to scream and threats ...

Ok, this does give a little more info....but from a different person. Again, this is a bit short, it was good though and believable. But I still want more....... To ...

Good, good stuff!!!! Anybody walking down the street would either mistake her for homeless. ???????????? The smell of grease and batter pounded on her as she stepped into the warm ...

Hey, This was great! Jamie sat down at her desk, moving the mouse the bring the computer back to life. Should be 'to' instead of 'the'. Personally, the language didn't ...

I've just realized that this argument is pointless, as you really can not compare books. A book is something that different people react to in different ways, some will love ...

It was one of those books when you finish it, and have to just sit there staring at a wall, blinking for like and hour before you can move or ...

He got what he deserved!!! :!: :!: A man lying on his back, soaked in red, a young girl, wide eyed and shaking splattered with it kneeling near him. Splattered ...

Ooh, Corrie seems rather creepy..... This was good, you're description is interesting and your characters are strong. However, this was really short and I think to crit properly I may ...

Fan-tast-IC!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! She was halfway to 'the spot' before she realized the flaw in her brilliant running away idea. Her notebook was still back there. Good use of sentence structure. Find ...

Very good, I like it when a chapter is on both accounts. Seeing him disgusts me, I no longer fear him as much as I hate him. You use the ...

What an evil horrible man. (was thinking of another word but I wont say it!) It was twelve midnight when she finally folded the bent and time worn notebook shut, ...

This was really good. I have one criticism however, sometimes a long piece like that (without any action etc) needs to be shortened to keep the reader interested. It wasn't ...

Great stuff!!! I'm absorbed well and truly now..... This line didn't make sense to me though: Consequences, however are best seen with your inner child however, because there's always somebody ...

I love Scrubs too!!!! Catchy title music as well...... ANYWAYS, another great piece. There's not much I can say as the other two have pointed out the mistakes and other ...

This was definitely the best chapter so far. There was a lot of emotion and action in this piece that kept me utterly absorbed. I do it to prove that ...