Alainna

I'm in love with it too. When I first looked at it I was a little worried about the length - I hate reading long pieces off the computer. But ...

As it stands this appears to be in the format of a poem of sorts. To me it's a piece of prose. - Maybe create a very short story out ...

Hi Max, I really liked this. I can see it being a song - would you perhaps consider re-vising it so it becomes a song? sometime you have to live ...

Hi, the concept of this was really good - relate-able. Are friendship always came first We shared are secerts with each other 'Are' should be 'our' in both sentences.'Secerts' should ...

This was good - especially if you wrote it five minutes before posting. Some of the words were very generic, even for a song. I liked the rhythm although I'm ...

This was very cute. I actually though the continuing rhyme worked. - Line three was a bit odd and I really think it makes very little sense. Consider something else? ...

This is a very good poem and really original - I loved the word itself. I didn't much love the repetition, you could really have done without it in stanza ...

Hi, welcome to YWS. The streets of Paris were terrible, the sand entered me in the eyes and I couldn’t see very much. This is awkward and doesn't really make ...

This was good, especially if this is your first post. (Just stay away from slang writing - plz etc - or the Grammar Nazi's will get you!) :wink: My eyes ...

I'm half way through Mercy - which is nowhere near as good as My Sister's Keeper. I'm sort of disappointed to be honest. After reading MSK I was really excited ...

I read Ready Or Not: All American Girl, with no background knowledge of Meg Cabot or her series (so I hadn't read the first one). I read it in about ...

I think I read Inkheart.... It was the first one. Anyways, I found it really long-winded and didn't manage to finish it. The idea was good but the way Cornelia ...

I just finished Atonement a week ago and I enjoyed it but was also disappointed by the end. The bit with the soldier very nearly made me cry; which wasn't ...

Short piece this time but your writing seems to have grown. The flow is much better than some of the beginning chapters. (Sixteen years old) *strangles Rosie* I love you ...

Hiya Rosie. This was good, it seemed a bit rushed though. So, here we go: (Thirteen years old) I think you know by now what I'm gonna say about that. ...