Published February 23, 2008
Best Friends
You and I are best friends
Best friends to the end
From time to time we disagree
but that never stopped us
Are friendship always came first
We shared are secerts with each other
Never hiding anything
Some times I wondered
If you knew more about me
Then I did myself
You were my best friend
I loved you like a brother
You were my best friend
I loved you like a sister
You were always there for me
I will always be there for you
We made are fears disappear
We could almost read each others minds
You were my best friend
I loved you like a brother
You were my best friend
I loved you like a sister
No matter how far
apart we are
You still are my best friend
Points:
Time spent:
IP address:
Canary word: Present
Possible AI signals:
Original Text:
Are you sure you want to delete this comment? This cannot be undone.
Mark this comment as a review? Points will be awarded to the poster.
Your comment was posted, but it wasn’t long enough to count as a review. Reviews need about four complete sentences (at least 250 characters). Try writing another review that explains your thoughts in more detail — the author will appreciate it, and you’ll earn points for it.
139,529 Literary Works • 672,599 Reviews
it was good but you need to consider using spell check
This is really good. I like how you have a friend to where you can describe like this. This is an excellent song and keep up the good work.
-Rick
Hey there!
Writing a song about friendship is always great
First of all, as Alainna already pointed out, you need to change some of the 'are's to 'our's:
#1)
#2)
#3)
There.
Now to the song. You put a lot of things in this song that are typical for friendship, but you could be talking about any friendship. I suggest making it more specific. What's special about this friendship?
I think it's a very good idea to say that you loved your friend as both, a brother and a sister.
Keep it up!
~Kalliope
P.S. PM me if you have any questions
Hi, the concept of this was really good - relate-able.
'Are' should be 'our' in both sentences.'Secerts' should be 'secrets'.
As a song it didn't have that much structure, I can see that it doesn't have a bridge or a proper chorus. It also lacks punctuation but I know how hard that is to get right.
I suggest you try and make this a little less generic and structure it better. Perhaps give it more of a rhythm as well so it works as a song.
All the best,
Alainna
xxx