Aedomir

Again, thanks! I have come a long way since I wrote this chapter, or in fact chapter two also. My favourite parts are chapter four. Thanks!

Wow, that's a thought... I knew that about the adjectives, but for some reason they just go down without me thinking. I will fix that! I may or may not ...

Oh yes! I want all the crits I can get, thanks for them. This is chapter one as well, the first 3 chapters I am rewriting. That is up to ...

That is great! Thanks, as I have said, I hate this most likely more than you and I feel I can myself love it too. Thank you!

Wow Wolf! That must have taken forever to write! Thnaks very much I really appreciate it. I have always had troubles with characterization, I really need to improve on that. ...

EDIT: I will post review in a second...

Please review! No more will be posted after this!

You WILL get published. On one condition, you finish it. So stop reading this and get going!

I loved this updated version. I can't remeber what the old one was like but let me tell you how much I adore that first paragraph. Others may diagree but ...

Erm... thanks for the crit but have you got against Aedomir?! He will grow on in the story trust me. Put it this way, he is confused about what is ...

I hate it too, ignore this part, lol.

Thanks very much everyone! That's really great if you like it!

Oh thanks! I was personifying death, graves and that... Thank you though!

Oh thanks everyone! This was my faovurite part... lol. I am rewrting the first chapter but I jsut can't put my finger on it...

Wow! I will review this in bed tonight, along with part 2... looks great!