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Re: Fallen Awake
First, I'd like to start off by saying this made me tear up. Second, I want to say that I haven't read any critiques on this, but if you get ...
Jan 10, 2012 -
Re: Being Alone
Hey. I just want to get the basics out of the way first. I was a bit iffy about your writing style at first, but then I got used to ...
Dec 26, 2011 -
Re: Bad Day.
Hmm, I would have enjoyed it more if you had put a little more description into maybe the setting, emotions... Anything along those lines. If you had intentionally made it ...
Aug 10, 2011 -
Re: Addiction
I have to admit, the thing that made me click on the link to this story was because of the name, "Jubilee." It's my middle name. I'm glad I clicked ...
Aug 5, 2011 -
Re: Pink Tassels; 150 words
I thought this was a great piece. I loved the topic, since most people are afraid to write about something such as this. You, though- You were bold enough to ...
Aug 5, 2011 -
Re: Autumn
You know what song goes well when reading this? Waltz For Venus Moving on... I liked this piece. It didn't drawl on and on with pointless details; I think you ...
Jul 31, 2011 -
Re: The Voice In School
I liked the transition of her opinions and the realism. I would immediately hate my classroom if I had to go back, too... All in all, I think its a ...
Jul 30, 2011 -
Re: Daddy
I thought this was a touching piece and I definitely felt sympathy. The stanzas, though... Sometimes, I feel they are misplaced. I know, multiple stanzas can form one sentence, but ...
Jul 30, 2011 -
Re: I hate you...
Yet, I still wanted to be your only girl. This comes from the fourth paragraph, and the last line. Now, the next paragraph has basically summed up Stella's feelings on ...
Jul 27, 2011
