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Hello there :) I'm going to start out with nitpicks, and I'm not trying to be mean i swear. I liked your story, but it was kind of hard to ...

I don't know what to say. In a way, this whole thing is very real; the fact that people lose themselves to something whether it be drugs, hatred, lust, and ...

This piece was interesting. I thought it was cool/sad that he had to die to realize the beauty of simple things in life, yet even after he died, he finally ...

Amazing, amazing, amazing! it's very very clear of the setting, but I don't think you're settling on the main idea of the bride being jittery. it seems like you're settling ...

Amazing. The mood of the story was sad, dark and compelling. It was well written, and emotional. The more I think of it, the more it seems to be realistic, ...

hey there :) i liked this short story; i think i definately portrays the insane thoughts of a girl around her man. And i also think that this was well ...

Absolutely. Amazing. I liked how you put in Romeo and Juliet parts in there, THAT'S what makes a classic. Which is exactly what this is; a classic. The ending was ...

Amazing, amazing, amazing! The whole story was chilling, and very descriptive of the overall scene of what was happening, and kind of the inward terror the girl felt. that piano ...

Hello there:) I really must say, this was a very interesting read. i liked how you centered the entire story around a simple child hood game of chance. It was ...

Hello there, Luxe! This. Was. AMAZING. The romance, the genuine emotion, the loss, the suspense. This piece was heart wrenching right through the very end. You captured the point of ...

hello there :) I really loved this piece. i felt like I connected with this because its very realistic, and because i've been through something similar. I think this piece ...

Hello there :) I would just like to say that this piece is very, very descriptive. i could visualize the things you said, and it's very moving. i think this ...

Hello there! I would just like to say very well written! the sense of mystery gives the whole story kind of a good vibe, kind of an erie vibe as ...

Hello! :) First off, I saw nothing wrong as far as I'm concerned with as far as grammar. Next, I would just like to say, in this short piece I ...

I love this piece! Mostly because I've been in a situation like this before, ad it hit close to home. I think you did a good job kind of developing ...