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Hello there! :D Bravo! this was well thought out and had a lot of great parts in here. I think that you should have expanded more on the past relationship ...

Hello there. :) Great piece :) really sad, and a big emotion trigger. Carly’s daddy left when the big buildings fell over. I'm guessing 9/11? Please tell me if I'm ...

Hello there! :) Great story clip! There were places where is was a little hard to follow, but it was all well thought out. You used dialogue really well in ...

Hello there :) I'll start out with some nitpicks. "WE NEVER DID!!! THAT BASTARD KILLED HER ONE WEEK BEFORE MY 18th BIRTHDAY!!!!" Easy on the caps and exclamation points here ...

Hello there :) I like this piece and I don't have any nitpicks for it. I do think that you could have given names for the characters, though. And you ...

Hello there :) I think this is really cute; paper sending a letter to paper, probably on paper, about loving another paper. Confusing, but cute :) This was well written ...

Hello there :) Great story! I'll start out with some nit picks: As I sit on the coast of the stone cold ocean, I watch the sunset. Their mixes of ...

Hello there! :D I really enjoyed your story! Onto the nitpicks! Yes, it might sound obsessive or stupid or like I am too in love, but I'm not in love. ...

Hello there :) Well written! :) I think this has alot of potential to be an entire story, like I could see this as a good start to something else. ...

Hello there :) I'll start with some nitpicks. I write this letter, knowing that when you read it, I will be dead. I always knew I had a limited time ...

Hello there. :) I don't have any nitpicks for you so I'm just going to jump right to the get-go. I loved this piece. It was interesting because, even though ...

Hello there :) I can really see alot of great moments in this piece. And you're rhyme scheme is interesting, because i haven't ever seen anyone write with one like ...

Hello there :) I'll start out with the nitpicks There was a thought swarming around my mind. My imagination was paying off. The thought was perhaps giving me a weird ...

Amazing. Amazing. Amazing. Hello there :) I don't have any nit picks for this piece so I'll go right to my impression: Astounding. Truly, you have a gift for this. ...

Hello there :) Good story. I enjoyed it. It sounds well thought out, and there seems like there's a good plot to it. Go back through, though, and notice that ...