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Hi there, Tyler! It's your freindly neighborhood ANate! On to the review! :twisted: So, where shall we start? Let's try the biginning. Lush green hillside filled his vision as he ...

Hi Averian! Here with a review. To start off, Let's look at the plot. I think that there is a definite possibility of a plot. I know you told me ...

I love it! It's very good. And Angels-Symphony was right. Perhaps Alonsa can show Amelia her dad or something. Or something related to Alonsa comes into this world, such as ...

Oh. My. Gosh. You are really talented! I think you're awesome! This is an amazing story, and I don't need to review it! If you need a really, really, really ...

Hi, I'll review you today! :D First of all, thoughts. Where the hell am I? This should be italizied. I'll not mention that anymore. Cool water lapsed against her feet ...

Ahh, new writer! Welcome to YWS! I liked this piece quite a bit. I hope you don't take criticism as an insult (And if you do, I can sympathize, I ...

Oh wow wow wow wow wow wow wow! How can I say that enough! This is wonderful! Are you going to get it published? I think you should! I love ...

This was a wonderful piece! I love it! It has an amazing plot(So Far :D ). Well, on to the review! I was dreaming I was wandering in the middle ...

Let the Review begin! Chapter One A foreigner Underline or bold titles. Averian Marie glanced up from her books to the large bay window facing the palaces celebrated gardens. Not ...

I'm sorry, but I don't love it. It's alright, but I just don't see a point. I bet you have something in mind, though, so just ingnore me. I woke ...

Well I really liked it. What I really want is more character description. When the boy changes into Ink Catcher, describe what Ink Catcher looks like, also why the librarian. ...

I really liked it, and if you continue it please PM me. As has been said, a bit more descripition on the princess would help quite a bit. Also, to ...

Well, It's pretty hard to review. The most subjects have been touched upon. Also, on originality, you should try and placce your own twist to it. It seems just like ...

I like your basic idea, and how you let the reader guess what will happen, while still leaving room for suprise. With that said, on to the critiqueing. 1) I ...