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    Re: A few shorter stories

    You...have a gift. You, have a gift. Kafka, you have a gift. I mean, it's not like I know your name or anything so I would know if something you've ...

    Jul 1, 2011

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: Math...mwahahahah

    I really thought that this was great. I know someone said before that you can say things like this without being cliche, which points out your talent. There were a ...

    Jul 1, 2011

  • Poetry » Narrative, General
    Re: bloated bites

    Wow. I'm really surprised that I'm the first to review this, although it is a really difficult poem to interpret and therefore review. This is just so layered and deep ...

    Jun 22, 2011

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: Somewhere down beneath

    I liked the overall premise of this poem. It is lurid in a way, mysterious and such, but if you make a few small tweaks it would be a lot ...

    Jun 21, 2011

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: A Meditation

    Inkwell, I hope you can appreciate the fact that I actually have no constructive criticizm for you; this was absolutely perfect. I mean, everything was perfect about this. If you ...

    Jun 19, 2011

  • Poetry » Lyrical, General
    Re: Blood Stops Blue.

    When someone reads a poem, their reaction and personal imagery will be completely different to that of anyone else's, I believe, providing of course the authour gives the reader enough ...

    Jun 19, 2011

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: Deception

    Wow. I really, really liked this. As for the content of this poem, I don't really have any criticizm for you, because your language and flow was great here. However ...

    Jun 17, 2011

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: Thoughts of a Call-Girl

    Mean Mr. Mustard, Maybe I appreciate excellent poetry more than I can appreciate excellent prose because I'm not good at writing poetry. Maybe it's that you can convey much more ...

    Jun 17, 2011

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: Love

    I think you should definately make this longer. I'm not sure, were you going for something short like this, are you just pouring out whatever you're thinking right now, or ...

    Jun 16, 2011

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: Musings #1

    Muffin, This was...really deep. I rarely ever read anything on YWS that's so thought out on this sort of morbid, if you will, level. I like how you structured each ...

    Jun 16, 2011

  • Poetry » Narrative, General
    Re: The story of your life

    Something like this is really art. I really love its simplicity and strong message regardless. There's really not much else I can say, but it's a great thing when a ...

    Jun 16, 2011

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: --

    Hey Megan, I liked your basic premise for this poem, but I'm not sure if you meant for this to be about something very specific or something rather general. Your ...

    Jun 16, 2011

  • Short Story » General, General
    Re: Cleaning Ladies.

    MamaLama, I really, really, loved this! Your beautiful timing really made this s work of art, even though in the beginning of the story I had trouble figuring out which ...

    Jun 16, 2011

  • Poetry » Other, General
    Re: Booty Shorts

    JoJo, I really, really, really, really loved this poem. It was hysterical (and yes, I clicked 'like')! However, I agree with RangerHawk that the lotion couplet should definately go, because ...

    Jun 15, 2011

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: Classifieds

    First of all, welcome to YWS, Crookedteeth! If you need any help at all with the site, please don't hesitate to ask myself or any of the hundreds of great ...

    Jun 12, 2011


A man hears what he wants to hear and disregards the rest.
— Paul Simon