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I agree with everything good everyone else said xD Great work (:

Haha I didn't quite get the concept for the poem but I really liked the poem anyway. I liked the way the "here I am" part follwoed through the whole ...

Haha wow that is excellent. It made me laugh. x] I want to see more stuff like this.

Hehe wow these are all fantastic. Haikus aren't the easiest things in the world and you have describred all your topic fantastically. I can't see anything you need to change ...

It was alright. I liked it and it flowed well and you had good discription and stuff. It wasn't really anything partiulary special though. Keep working at it though and ...

Alright. I am going to change those few grammatical/spealling mistakes. And yeah I agree with the end. I was already going way over my amount of words and I basically ...

Somebody please crit this? :(

Wow this is brillaint. You have used powerful words. It is fantastic. I like the tounge twister of syllables. I wouldn't have noticed it if Firestarter hadn't mentioned it. I ...

I thought it was brilliant. My only problem is the last line in the second seemed a bit off rhythm. But your ideas and description were great. I liked the ...

Haha wow this is pretty funny XD You made this up on the spot? Well done (: The last line didn't fit but I mean that in kind of a ...

Haha wow. That is brilliant XD I'm sure this would be a trillion times better than the original which is apile of rubbish (:

Thank you for the great comments everyone (:

^I agree to the above. Minus the fact it wasn't even romotely humourous. I'm not trying to be nasty.

Wow, I wasn't expecting such an excellent repsonse (: I agree with you all completely about the title. I thought that before I posted but decided to leave it because ...

Thank you for the feedback you too. I know it's probably a difficult poem to understand.