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I quite like this but not as much as your other poem inspired by a similar theme. Some of the rhythm and flow was a little off it places. Such ...

This poem bored me silly. I'm sorry. It has been written a million times before. You haven't gone in depth and exlpained things such as, him lying to you. What ...

Haha wow that was pretty good xD It was a really original idea and very patriotic. I didn't understand the Purple Heart bit...maybe that is something to do with being ...

Haha wow this was brilliant and such a unique idea. You wrote this really well with great word choice and description. A few things I think let this poem down ...

I liked the shortness of this poem. There was definetly a hidden message in here somewhere that will take a while to crack. I think you made great word choices ...

Half the idea for this poem was slightly clichetic(make up word I know people) and a few lines I had read before but you twisted it around by not knowing ...

This poem really seemed to change what it was about half way through. You just left me thinking what? Make up your mind on what this poem is about or ...

I have to agree with what everyone else has said. It is a good idea but the way you have written it could apply to absoutlutely anybody. In some ways ...

Yeah I agree the first four lines were fantastic but I think you need to go and extend the idea of his flaws. What were they? Describe them. You only ...

Wow I thought this was so beautiful and artistic. I really felt as if I was there, watching the sunset. You captured the moment fantastically. It flowed really well and ...

The rhythm of this poem was much more like that of a rap that that of poem. I really had no idea what was going on either. None of it ...

Yeah I agree. *Points upwards* I was just like huh? when it came to the end. Thats how it ends? I think you had a fantastic idea here and it ...

Emm it just seemed a little childish and lacked a lot of imagination. Lines 4 and 7 were really is the type of thing I think you would write when ...

I liked this I thought it was pretty good. It was a great idea although the whole Lost Highway thing made no sense to me. This poem flowed well although ...

Alright I really like the scheme/layout for this poem and how it followed through the whole poem. It was nice and simple but it worked well. Two things I would ...