-KayJuran-

Whoa, thanks for that! I need to print all this!

Thanks for the comments and akisha, thanks loads that was really constructive criticism! I'll look over those things again! :P

just put this onto Word so i can look at it while not spending my parents money on Internet. i'll get back to you! :wink:

Hey! Thanks for the comments and for replying so quickly! I'm sorta surprised you like the dialogue 'cause I never thought I was any good at dialogue really... Do you ...

* * * * * With the tavern almost empty, the bard packed away her instruments and joined the barkeep and the rest of the staff for a late-evening meal. ...

“Take cover!” A flurry of arrows flew over the man’s head as he dived behind a nearby rock. Pressing his back closer to the cold stone, he tightened his grip ...

that is the longest crit i have ever seen! well done you

i like the new avvie hunter!

i just finished reading everything you've posted hunter! go me! :P and... i think its great!! i like the most recent bit where its like he's getting memories he didn't ...

i wish you had more time too... your stuff is amazing!!! :P

post some more bobo!! i wanna read!!! :D

when i was in guides we had a similar song only it was the more normal version ie. were from (insert town here) minus all the scottish accent/dialect etc. but ...

this brings such great images to your mind - it's a very visual poem which explains why a lot of people would definitely say "ewwww" to some of these images... ...

thanks mesh! was considering putting this in the lyrics section but im not musical at all so i couldnt put a tune to it by myself... oh & im not ...

i know what you mean... its def not my favourite poem ive written... but i thought i'd put it here anyway - i figure the more advice i get on ...