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A quick note: I don't usually use swearing in stories, but I felt it was only put in where necessary. However, if anyone feels that there is excessive swearing at ...

Hehe, I like it... Any idea how regular is this going to be? :)

Ah, so you did read it... ;) But, lol, I still owe you a crit for the Chair... Glad you liked it though.

Hey, any questions about Britain, you know who to ask. :wink: Feel free to pm me if you want to know anything. I just noticed the French thing - after ...

Ah, I love it. :) There are some typos though, among other things.. Do you want this critiquing or is it purely here for comic value?

Thanks for the comments! Gummy, that was really helpful. I thought there was something odd about the brackets, but I couldn't see how to fix it before.. so thanks for ...

When will you English folks convert to American? :smt104 ...

I like the piggy picture! :P

Yep, that's right! Anyways, we call our japanese teacher Sensei, so Jennafina's probably right there..

Okay, all of the chapters 'cept the latest one are on my pen drive, so I *promise* I'll crit at least part of it this week. I want to be ...

Thanks for the crit, Fire! Very helpful. I thought you were English! Use an 's'! We're not American blasphemers. ^ arg! What am I doing?! I've obviously been on this ...

Few typos, but apart from that, I liked this new development. I can really see these characters, the way you write they really *do* seem real. I'll try and do ...

^ window; he slowly squeezed his warm bun, wisps of smoke drifting into the air like ghostly hands. It's actually meant to be 'drifted' because Marcus is squeezing the bun ...

vanished oil-paintings ^ va r nished. ran to raised chair ^ ran to a raised chair was the Cook at Weir House, it was ^ at Weir House ; it ...

Grrrr... I just did a huuugggeee long crit, and then my laptop messed up and deleted it all! I’m doing this one on Word so it doesn’t get deleted. :P ...