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I live in England so my school life's not as exciting as American High Schools but I have to say I absolutely love this. If you don't mind I would ...

This is exactly what i needed to unwind and enjoy after a stressful day. I absolutely love the details about the silver tree, it is very difficult to make narrative ...

Well, firstly, welcome to YWS and secondly, this is one of the first NANCY DREW fan-fics I've come across. I absolutely love Nancy Drew mysteries and have a collection of ...

[quote] It was no wonder his punishments were getting worse I think this sounds a little boring, but that's only my opinion. Why not try: It was no wonder his ...

First of all, I love this! I love the appealing unique prose, the language, and the fact that this was purely written for a school project astounds me. I agree ...

I thought i was reading a Jane Austen novel! You have captured the tone and elegance of Pre-1914 prose exactly. It is difficult to do, and speaking as a historical ...

Wow! What a story, it could be the first chapter of something amazing. I couldn't find any grammatical errors however in the last paragraph you say Rasem felt sick, cold. ...

Hi bkwrm, lilmisswritergal here. Can I just say, that this is a beautiful song, which I would love to use in my Script: The Cane of Albrithi, as it is ...

I love the idea of not giving too much away in the first chapter, and I think it has the makings of a good novel. Like the others, I have ...

Hi Aedomir! Can I just say, what a totally random but hilarious story you created. I love Bessie the radioactive cow and the idea of just calling people by their ...

I've got to say, for a random chapter, Fairy, this is very good. I think you could start a proper story with this at the beginning as it doesn't give ...

I like the beginning of this. It's something a bit different. I agree with the rest about the waves, it's a bit of a struggling paragraph. I also agree with ...

Stella strikes again with a brilliant chapter! Wow! Can't find any faults though, grammatic or otherwise! Can someone please answer the question on my blog? I am stuck! :x Anyway, ...

This is a brilliant retelling of the real little mermaid story. :D I like the idea of having a 'daddy's little girl' type figure, but could you possibly add more ...

Wow, what a story! I LOVE the idea of having separate kingdoms with different star qualities, yet it has a romantic element too, linking to the typical fairytale story. [quote] ...