*DaughteroftheMoon*

Oh, the House of Night Series is good. So here are some of my recommendations: The Faerie Path series by Frewin Jones Abarat by Clive Barker There is a really ...

Okay, so here goes the review that you asked for. Diction: Okay, I'm going to do this first sence it seemed the subject that you lacked in most. I found ...

Okay, you need to put these more into formation. They are everywhere, see they could look like this: Bloody Kisses, better then death. Bloody Kisses, almost like theft. They steal ...

Okay so here goes you review, whether your ready or not. :) Grammar/Punctuation: I see that you are not using punctuation in your poem. If you are not going to ...

Well, the only meaning I can find in this poem is death, but I am one that most of the time cannot even see the obvious. haha. So on to ...

Here is the review you asked for, sorry if it is a bit late. I have actally read this poece before you asked me to review it, and noticed about ...

Sentance Structure: I think that you could rearrange your sentance structure. Alot of the sentances began with she did this and she did that. It would make much more interesting ...

A first poem huh? I'll try not to be to harsh. mwa ha ha.... Okay so first off I would suggest splitting some of your lines up. Alot of them ...

I never realized it was in Japan...until now. So Your not the only one. But I didn't like extras compared to the other books, and I loved Tally's point of ...

Rhythm: I don't think that your rhythm is all to consistant in this poem. I would suggest that for this to be better that you quit repeating Tis the saeson, ...

I had just gotten done with a thirty minute review on yours when my computer shut down, so, I will attempt to recall from memory what I wrote down the ...

Alrighty now, here goes your review! The idea of the poem has very much potential. I think that if you extended it, it would be alot better. But basically you ...

Okay when you post lengthy poems like this try to post them seperate. Shower Poem: I tihnk the beat was off just a tad bit. I also think that you ...

Hey there. I liked, no loved the idea of your poem. Although I think it could use some improvement. I would suggest that you take a few never's out. A ...

... I like these first lines, they drew me in, although, I suggest that you shorten up the last line in this stanza, its way longer than the first few ...