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Cody scans the crowd, looking for someone who doesn’t seem too busy or too intimidating. Most people are either dancing, drinking, or already deep in their own glittering conversations. There’s holographic screens floating around that make it hard to focus on someone, but Cody spots a guy leaning against a curved railing, sipping from a glowing bottle and casually watching a screen floating by.
He looks normal. His clothes aren’t as flashy—just a white jacket with glowing cuffs and pants that only blink a little at the seams. He looks like he might be in his late twenties.
Cody clears his throat and steps up.
“Excuse me. Do you mind if I ask you something?”
The guy turns, a bit startled when he sees them. “Woah. Why are you so dirty?”
“Huh?”
“Oh, sorry. Reflex. What’s up?”
“We’re looking for someone. My friend came up here about a week ago, and—”
“Wait,” the guy cuts in, already nodding. “Lemme guess. First time in the city, right?”
Cody nods. “How did you know?”
“Well, you two kinda stand out . . .”
The man’s looks at Cody, then at Lilian, whose hair is sticking to her cheeks from sweat, her oversized coat is patched and dirt-smudged, and her shoes look half-melted at the soles. Lilian’s head follows a little servoid as it rolls by carrying a bunch of drinks. It hands one out to her, but she’s so mystified that she’s doesn’t grab it. After it rolls away, she whirls around, her eyes sparkling with wonder.
“Cody, did you see that?”
“Yes, I did.”
“It just handed me a drink for free! I didn’t have to pay anything!”
“You didn’t grab the drink though . . .”
The guy chuckles at her reaction. “Yep. There’s lots of free stuff here in Nylon City. I still remember my first time here.”
As the crowd starts expanding, Cody pulls Lilian, still wide-eyed, out of the way so she doesn’t get lost. Once that’s done, he returns to his conversation with the man.
“Can I ask—are you from the Sub-City, too?”
The man chuckles again. “Well, of course I am. Most everyone here is. If you see people partying outside, chances are they’re Tier 4. If you want to visit any of Nylon City’s actual attractions, you’ll need to at least get Tier 3.”
Tier 4. Tier 3. Cody vaguely remembers the terms from the servoid’s screen at the gate, but they’re still fuzzy.
Lilian chimes in, voice hopeful. “So, can you help us find our friend? His name’s Rylan.”
“Rylan? Can’t say I’ve heard of him. Is he a chaser?”
Cody perks up at the new word. “. . . chaser? What’s that?”
The man looks at them strangely, as if they should already know.
“You know,” he says, gesturing vaguely to the glowing skyline around them. “Chasing the dream, chasing riches. Chasing Tier 2. Usually really dreamrotted.”
Cody and Lilian just look up at him with wide eyes. Seeming to realize they have no idea what he’s talking about, he sighs.
“Yeah, I can’t help you, but all the first-timers should head to the Welcome Hub. It’s down that way. You’ll find it easily.”
The man points to a side path to the left, sandwiched between two huge glass buildings.
“Thanks. We won’t bother you any further,” Cody says with a nod of his head.
“No worries at all.” The guy hesitates for a second, then adds with a friendly smile, “And hey—might wanna stop by one of the clothes districts at some point. You know . . . so you don’t stand out too much.”
Cody nods in understanding. They’re going to need to change up their style if they want to blend in.
After waving the helpful man goodbye, Cody and Lilian follow the path the man pointed out. The noise from the main street dims behind them, replaced by softer ambient tones—music without a source, like it’s playing inside the walls. The buildings here are taller and quieter. There’s still holographic screens floating by, going both ways down the street, but not many people around.
As the atmosphere relaxes, the two of them stop just to catch a breath. Cody sits down at a small table with an umbrella fixated in the middle, probably made to block the sun. He finds it strange that people here would even want to keep out of the sun.
Cody reclines in the metal chair. Finally getting a chance to slow down, he starts to read the actual words on the screens floating by. Most of them seem to be advertising products, but one of them stands out. It’s a bright red screen with sharp letters.
“Warning: Unauthorized data interference is a Class 7 offense.
If you spot suspicious behavior from any technology or servoid malfunctions, report it immediately to the nearest spectroid. If you know anyone who is attempting to hack into Nylon’s networks, don't be a bystander.
Help keep Nylon City secure.
Remember: Hackers don’t just break code. They break trust.”
Cody calls Lilian over. “Are you seeing this, too?”
Lilian sits down next to him and looks at the slow-moving holographic screen.
“Hey, I saw a few of those already. This city must really hate hackers! But why would anyone want to hurt Nylon City? It’s so amazing here.”
Cody nods. “I wonder . . .”
Before Cody can finish the thought, another screen drifts past—larger, glossier, and brighter than the rest. It spins slowly in place, vibrant gold letters on a white background, with music that sounds like a child’s lullaby mixed with a victory fanfare.
“YOUR FUTURE AWAITS!
Every festive was once a chaser.
Start your journey today and join the elite of Nylon City.
Just one lucky break… and the skyline could be yours.”
[Apply Now – Tier 3 Opportunity Passes Available!]
The screen transitions into smiling faces—young people dressed in glittering suits and gowns, laughing as they’re lifted into the air on floating platforms. Fireworks burst behind them. One girl blows a kiss. Another one cries with joy as she's handed a shining Tier 2 bracelet.
Lilian gasps, eyes locked on the screen like it’s calling to her.
“That could be us,” she whispers.
Cody blinks. “What?”
“Maybe we can make it rich,” she says louder. “What if we’re one of the lucky chasers?”
“We’re not chasers, Lily. We’re here to find Rylan and that’s it.”
Lilian looks up, her expression brightening. “What if this is what happened to Rylan? He didn’t get stuck—he won. Now he’s living the good life as a festive and we just have to find him!”
“That’s just unrealistic, and you know it.”
But Lilian isn’t listening anymore. Her eyes follow another ad floating down the path. She starts after it.
“Lily—hey, wait!” Cody calls, but she waves him off.
“Just taking a look!” she says over her shoulder.
Cody sighs. He turns back to the floating screens, and that’s when he sees another ad. It’s designed in such a way that he wonders if it’s even an ad. It’s not like the last few. It’s smaller, almost trying to hide. It’s darker. Simpler. No music. Just bold gray text on a black background.
“WARNING: DREAMROT
Prolonged exposure to overstimulation and addictive sensory environments may lead to cognitive deterioration. Symptoms include delusion, dependency, violent withdrawal, and psychological collapse.
Please party responsibly. For assistance, locate your nearest MedCenter.”
The text slowly fades into a blurred face—eyes wide, tears running down, smile twitching and frozen in place like the person doesn’t know how to stop.
Cody stares at it, feeling sick to his stomach.
“Dreamrot,” he says under his breath.
He remembers Maddox’s warning. About how it breaks people. “In Nylon City, the only evil you really have to watch… is the kind inside yourself.” He glances in the direction Lilian ran off to, suddenly uneasy.
“Lily?” he calls out, standing up.
No answer.
“Lily, seriously, come look at this.”
Still nothing. For some reason, he’s reminded of scavenging on those garbage dumps in the Sub-City. Lilian would always run up ahead, so far off that Cody’s voice couldn’t reach her. Cody gets up and starts walking briskly down the street. The holograms blur past him, from discounts, to slogans, to velvet invitations. Every corner of the city seems to be trying to catch his attention.
He rounds the corner and stops.
Lilian is standing in front of a marble statue, but she’s not alone. A woman is standing next to her. Cody walks up to them.
“Lily, who is this?”
Lilian turns around and smiles. “Cody, look who I found! This is Ruby. She said she’s willing to show us around the city!”
Cody observes the lady. She looks normal enough, with a flashy red dress that seems fitting of someone who stays in Nylon City. She’s quite a bit taller than Lilian and has short neck-length hair. She wears heavy makeup so he can’t really place her age, and her smile is warm and easy, the kind that feels practiced but genuine.
“Hey there,” the woman says amiably. “I’m Ruby. We’ve just been chatting about the city—it’s a lot to take in, huh?”
“Definitely. So are you from the Sub-City, too?”
“Me? Oh, no—I’ve been up here for a while now” she chuckles. “I work over at the Welcome Hub. Basically, I help folks get their bearings. Nylon can be a little overwhelming the first time.”
Lilian laughs, already bouncing on her heels. “Cody, you just missed it! Ruby was telling me all about this statue.”
She gestures toward the towering marble figure behind her. It’s a man in an outdated, glossy suit—sharp lapels, chin lifted proudly, one arm outstretched like he’s offering the entire city in his palm. His expression is warm but commanding, like a father figure carved in stone.
“Isn’t it amazing?” Lilian says breathlessly. “It’s a one-to-one replica of this guy named John Nylon. I guess no one visits this place because they’re too busy shopping or heading to the entertainment sectors.”
“John Nylon,” Cody repeats, squinting at the statue. “Who’s that?”
Ruby steps closer to the statue and explains, “John Nylon built this place about seventy years back. People say he was kind of a big dreamer—a little ahead of his time. He wanted a city where anyone could find a little piece of joy, I guess. And, well, here we are.”
Lilian turns to Cody, grinning.
“You have to admit it’s cool. I mean, back in the Sub-City, our statues are just piles of trash someone carved faces into.”
“True.”
Suddenly, Cody remembers the holographic ad from earlier. “Wait, Lily. I have something to show you.”
“Sure! Ruby, you should come with us!”
Cody leads the way, retracing his steps toward the table beneath the umbrella. The holograms are still gliding by, some of them cycling the same ads they saw before, but not the one he’s looking for.
He slows.
“It was right here,” he mutters, scanning each screen that floats by. “Gray background, no music. It said something about dreamrot—real blunt. Like a warning.”
Lilian tilts her head. “Are you sure you didn’t imagine it? I never saw anything like that.”
“I didn’t imagine it,” Cody says firmly, stepping into the center of the path, trying to catch the feed from a better angle. “It was right here.”
But now, there’s nothing but sparkle and color. Ruby walks up behind them.
“Oh yeah, those screens change depending on what people watch. Kinda creepy, right?” she laughs lightly. “The system tries to keep things upbeat. Most folks don’t wanna see the... heavier stuff.”
“Yeah, but—” Cody begins, stopping himself. “Forget it.”
“It could have been a glitch,” Lilian offers.
Ruby smiles warmly. “If you want, I can tell you more about it sometime. The official term is Deprivation Trauma, but most people just stick with dreamrot. Honestly, I don’t think it’s that big of a deal. But hey—don’t take my word for it. Just look around. Do these people look sick to you?”
She gestures to the glittering street, the laughter, the dancing, the lights.
“Some folks just can’t handle the fun, but you two seem smart. You’ll be fine.”
Lilian nods in agreement. “See, Cody? Nothing to worry about.”
Right. Nothing to worry about. Cody nods slowly, letting the tension ease from his shoulders. He doesn’t know much about Nylon City himself—maybe Ruby’s right.
Yet somehow, Cody still can’t shake the feeling that not everything is as it seems.
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Believe it or not, I got unreasonably excited walking home from work today, knowing I get to read Ch4 later =D [And then the wife had ~plans~, so it’s MUCH later than I expected but here I am!]

I’m also thinking again that maybe you should have mentioned before how many ways there are up to the big city. I kinda imagine this central elevator shaft so all the riff-raff comes into Nylon from the same point which… cannot be, given the size of the city right?
Wait a sec, there is free food running around in Nylon? Or are there… hidden cost. Or maybe it is part of the 500 per day service package that got them up?
Hmm lemme think. Send 2 ppl up to grab free stuff worth more than 1000 credits, boom, profit. Right? Especially the food should be valued pretty high, no?
Why does it do that? “As the crowd starts expanding“ Arent they still chilling with mr guy?
Oh I like the new term and the casual way mr guy says this: “Chasing Tier 2. Usually really dreamrotted.” Like ofc but still. Very good! I‘m rly invested.
I like how you describe the city. I like the floating screens and the constant advertisements. Also ofc they are making the citizens watch out for hackers xd Especially like the “breaking trust” line =D
Also aha, the city acknowledges that the sub dwellers want upward mobility, so they offer the illusion of that. Some guy or gal or inbetween pal will get lucky but most will remain dirt poor and dream rotted
Oha, and dangle a new thing in front of Lily and she starts forgetting why she’s here. Understandable, this entire thing is super overwhelming. Cody barely has time to be suspicious of anything! =D
I also find it…. Strange that even if Rylan made it big, why wouldn’t he at least sent notice to his friends downstairs. Would be an interesting thought for Cody to have bc that is the crux of the issue, right? How do nylon and sub city citizens communicate with each other?
Stumbled a bit over this phrasing: “ that’s when he sees another ad.” Bc the next sentence is like “but it wasn’t an ad, maybe” and… well, why write it in this order? Why not go, he spots something new that at first he thought is an ad but then the discrepancies show and bam, you describe what it actually is?
Oh aha! There we have a medcentre ad. Even more reason to punch Ruby before paying her xd
I like how you separated the two. I like the genuine concern Cody can display and I really like how this entire paragraph is written: “Still nothing. For some reason, he’s reminded of scavenging“
Ah any, ANY description on how the woman and Lily are together in this scene would go a long way: “A woman is standing next to her.” Like is she looming, just casually with Lily, do they just happen to stand next to each other to admire the statute. All this should come before Cody walks up to them, so we get a bit of a better feel for what he’s feeling right now!
And there she is. With her very puncheable face 😊
Remember the link I gave you. “she chuckles.“ You cant chuckle a sentence =D (at least not a long one)
Oh but this sounds like genuine art! “our statues are just piles of trash someone carved faces into.”
Hmm knocking points off of Lily for a change. Why doesn’t she believe that Cody saw an ad/warning like that? They just got here so anything’s possible.
Oh and there is Ruby, subtly influencing them to stay longer: “Just look around. Do these people look sick to you?“ Very cool to see! Ofc also this: “ but you two seem smart.” I think with the 2 guys the kids interacted with before (Maxwell and Mr Guy), it wasn’t hard to see that they at least had nothing to sell these kids, no life style, maybe some lies but not related to their experiences and what they can expect from Nylon. And here comes Ruby to tell them what special ppl they are and that they would be the perfect little consumers… hrhrm.
Oh this is a nice chapter. I’m warming again to Cody. Being overwhelmed really brings out the best in him =D I like that he’s the only one who got the warning abt dreamrot, it seems to fit with what Ruby says, that the ads change depending on the person who watches them. System probably clogged him as less likely to buy stuff so he gets to have the warnings. I also enjoyed his reaction when he briefly lost Lily. There was no condescension there, only genuine worry. Very nice!
I, as mentioned, didn’t like that Lily immediately didn’t believe Cody for basically no reason. They heard about dreamrot multiple times now so … I just don’t get it. She hasn’t been with Ruby that long so I doubt Ruby’s the one who poisoned her mind on this.
Speaking of Ruby. I like her. I ofc know what she is but I think this is subtle enough that she rly comes across as helpful. You also had 2 characters before her who were also helpful in their own way (HE HACKED OF HIS ARM, I WILL NOT FORGET) so we aren’t immediately suspicious of her. Cody senses something’s wrong but that’s fine. He should be the more wary. I like that. Ruby seems so fun and engaging and I think, she really could be a great helper for ppl to get started… even if she announced what her purpose is. Wouldn’t you rather interact with someone lively who knows stuff abt the place than a boring machine?
Lastly Mr Guy. He seems nice. Also someone who made it and doesn’t begrudge the newbies. I don’t think we’ll see him again.
I also don’t think Ryland won a Tier 2 ticket, but he might have tried to get it. Maybe there are …strings attached and he’s working of his debt somewhere horrible? MAYBE THERE ARE UNDERGROUND FIGHTING RINGS? Ohhh the possibilities are endless!
Hellooo!! Even when not knowing much context of the story, this chapter is really captivating! The whole setting in general, but also the suspense that lingers with the characters, easily brings interest. While the language is quite simple, its directness works quite well to communicate this really complicated, technology-based city without using overly-complicated language or more varied and expanded prose that could potentially make the details of this city get loss to the reader.
This response to the simple act of handing a free drink is such a great, simple way to both hint at the heartache (and perhaps trauma) Lilian has been through that has molded and built her, while also hinting at how susceptible and vulnerable she is to potential harm.
For the warning about Dreamrot to appear for Cody but not for Lilian is so interesting. This likely reflect their psyche—Cody is more heavily guarded and Lilian isn't, though this reflection probably goes beyond simple observation. I think possibly, the warning appears for people who are less susceptible and deeply guarded to bring this illusion of "trust" between them and the city, for them to be more likely to ease up to the city and eventually become generally tolerate or even susceptible to Dreamrot.
NYLON is a city is set up to be this utopia-like world for people to escape to, without thinking too deeply or serious about anything else outside of or related to this escape. It's this epitome of escapism, particularly for people who are from a city (Sub-city) where there is constant heartache and, as I presume, concerns about the way of living due to how much it's based off of financial gain. Here you can just simply exist; a concept that is comforting, but not as simple.
Escapism is this thing that is inviting when you have constantly dealt with the grittiness of real life. While going into "another world" may not always a bad way to cope, this city shows there's a point where escapism become harmful to how they perceive things around them, others, and perhaps even themselves. I think this chapter and this city could bring an interesting discussion about coping with escapism- there is a point where it can be harmful, as it doesn't fully address the pain you've been through and you may potentially lose many parts of yourself with this way of coping. You don't *really* cope, but instead lose yourself without ever confronting reality that could help you better cope.
Other than that, it really brings to light how much someone's deeply troubled mind don't always just "appear" by looks or how one acts. Ruby's words when commenting on Dreamrot, that downplays the possible severity of it because it doesn't "appear" with others, mirrors how many people in real life perceive and interact with bad mental health and questionable coping mechanisms. I think many people don't fully comprehend how much people who are deeply troubled can easily blend in with what is normal and function in real life. There isn't always blatant behavior or "looks" attached to who has bad mental health, and that way of thinking can be incredibly dangerous and harmful for how you perceive others or even yourself.
As shown by Ruby's lines, not only it hints that the appearance of Dreamrot is this subtle, thing that can easily blend in with the way of life in this city, but also we have no idea if *she* has gotten Dreamrot or not. Her thinking may also mirror how many people perceive this condition in the city, which is dangerous thinking as it means people who may eventually get this condition, like Lilian, won't get as much help as they could get because it's something to downplay or because they blend in too much.
Great, interesting chapter!! The suspense is great, the characters work nice with each other and there is a lot of things you can think about the setting! Will think about trying to read the other chapters! Keep writing!!
Thank you so much for the review!!!
I really recommend you taking a quick look at the other chapters. It would help with understanding the context that you're missing, but you bascially already get the main points I'm trying to convey, which makes me really happy to be honest haha
This is a very on-point description of Lilian and her main trait of vulnerability. I'm honestly surprised you caught that without reading the first few chapters
Your insights here are actually super helpful!! I don't even think I thought that deep when I was writing this, but it's really making me think now lol. Also yes, the goal with this novel was kind of to discuss themes of hope/escapism/trust basically what you kind of outlined.
I really hope to see you on other chapters, and thanks again for this amazing review!!!
i will definitely eventually read more chapters, and also try looking out for any more that are published!!
im really glad i was able to get the points of the chapter & some character traits in my review!! i also hope to review more chapters ^^! you're very welcome :>!!!!
Hello! It's CATS here for a review! I saw that this just came out; I was so curious to know what would happen once they arrived in Nylon City, so here I am! Let's JUMP in.
I feel like Lily's eagerness to dive in without thought would get her in trouble. I'm so glad that Cody is cautious about this new found place. Oh, they found a man. I wonder how they can stop themselves from giving into dreamrot (OMG I was about to say brainrot)
Ruby sure is...interesting. We don't know whether or not she is taken by dreamrot, although I think it would be pretty obvious if she is. Did John Nylon design the city so that dreamrot could take over on purpose? We will probably find out later in the story.
The dreamrot warning really digged deep into the reader's uneasiness and Cody's fears.
Ughhh he went to show Lily and first, she doesn't believe it, and second, it was GONE.
That's really eerie. But great details and I love the feelings that the reader gets! It gets them hooked in real good.
Ends with a cliffhanger. I love the unease and hesitation of Cody. He sure is a great thinker, great mind.
I can't WAIT.
Like actually, I can't wait for more. Tell me when you post the next chapter...I really enjoyed the suspense in this one!
Happy Reading, Happy Writing, and Happy RevMo!
Love,
Your Fan
CATS
TYSM for the review!!!!
LOL i do this a lot too, and I'm the author
yes!!! that's exactly what I was going for
No problem! I love this it%u2019s so capitivating!!!
No problem! I love this it%u2019s so capitivating!!!