Hello there friend! ^^ I am finally here with a review for you! (Sorry it took so long! My life has become hectic and I can barely catch a breath, but I've been so excited to read the last chapter of this suspenseful series!)
And oh my gosh did you deliver! There's so much I thought was really cool - let's break it down, shall we?
I love the descriptions in the beginning with Luisa seeing into the past. These visions of other things happen for her a lot, don't they? It's a clever way as the author to show things Luisa couldn't possibly have known. I think, though, this could have been elevated if we knew why Luisa knew these things. For example, if there are clues earlier on that she has magic, and it's known that witches can see the past and other events from things they never experienced, then Luisa's "visions" may be more believable and more engaging.
Honestly though, I love the scene about Luisa's young mother temporarily banishing Helena away. I love the description, the action, and Luisa piecing it all together.
But then…how would she defeat the likes of Helena? Was there something else that Luisa didn’t know?
You're very good at leading us as the reader from one thought to another, and good at guessing what the reader is thinking about. Luisa wondering how this happened and how everyone is still alive if Helena had visited her mother? Obviously something happened, and it's truly an amazing way of leading the reader through what's going on and also shows us a bit of Luisa's thoughtful and logical nature.
The ending after the end, aka, basically the section equivalent to an epilogue was well done. I can clearly see how the future unfolds, and I love how the little pairs of girlfriend-boyfriends end up being together <3. To me, the 'epilogue' part didn't feel too rushed or too slow. Oh and I can already imagine what's going to happen to Lola with that ominous ending there - I can sense some after-the-end-of-the-story potential from Lola there.
However, the ending, as in them defeating Helena and Jackson did feel a bit rushed. For me, it was the poems. I don't quite understand how they fit with the story, as neither had been mentioned before the chapter. It feels like an easier way to end the story than piecing together some elements that could have been used later to put it all together again, but that's just my opinion. However, I really liked the poems themselves; their rhyming scheme was really good and it didn't feel very forced. It made sense with the story (which can be hard to do) and they were just cool in general. Overall, I think if you just added some elements either earlier in the story that connected with the ending, or took some elements from earlier and connected them to the ending, it would feel a little bit more natural.
However. This ending is amazing. I feel like everything has been wrapped up very nicely, and besides what I've already mentioned, I don't think there are many loose ends!
I love the addition of this:
Marie disappeared into a lavender orb, and then, even the orb was gone. She had vanished from their lives just how she appeared in their lives.
The end connects right back to the beginning! I especially love this part; I love it when authors can bring a story full circle, and you have done just that!
I'm really sad about Ava, but I'm glad she got to go to heaven and can still visit Earth. It honestly feels like the perfect ending for her.
I hope Jackson and Elvis are alright wherever they are. They weren't perfect, but I hope at least they are together, and maybe they can end up being better. Maybe Jackson will get a redemption arch, who knows?
It's good to know Helena's gone, but now I'm really curious how she turned out that way? You may have mentioned something about that in the past, which in that case, I'm sorry I don't remember, but it'd be interesting to know why she was so evil and why she was the way she was. Also, has her influence on anyone else impacted anything? Is there more to her story than we know? Is this not truly the last we'll see of this demon, or is there any remnant of her presence?
I do have a question, because I'm curious ~ What do you think of this story? Was it what you hoped for? Was it better? Different? I don't often finish my stories XD so I'm curious what you think, as you finished many over the years, right?
But the best thing anybody could ever do is keep going and hope for the best, because if they resign to their fate, then they’re destined to die.
And the very ending - those last lines. They sum up everything perfectly, all while offering a beautiful final moral for the reader to take with them as they go about the rest of their day. It feels so complete, and it leaves a feeling of contentment, while also allowing for the story to be added on in the future, as you said you'd add some extra things, I believe? Even if you don't, I think this is one of the best endings that could have been added to this story. I love it all, and thank you for letting me come on this zombie filled journey! Your writing is so unique and very fun to follow - is there any other ongoing story you're in the middle of that you'd like to suggest I pick up?
Thank you again for sharing. It's not always easy to let your story out into the world and and let stranger's eyes gaze upon your masterpiece, but this was so much fun and I'm glad I could be a little part of it. Please keep writing; you're growing your skills so much each time! Hope your day is full of cute animals and spooky ghosts, and hope you're excited for a spooky season coming up!
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