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this poem is really mysterious. i could not understand what you were trying to convey in this poem. there were a few grammatic errors here and there. i think you should try to make your message clearer.
personally i don't quite get the sense in your poem. well, maybe you intended to confuse, but really.. this piece is quite confusing. i understand it a little. i'm quite curious about the game you played. it sounds mysterious.
keep writing.
I don't have a lot to say about this poem. I am not going to talk about grammar because you seem to have it covered and I suck at it. This poem is really good and original. I don't recall reading a poem with the same topic. Or if a poem had the same topic it was conveyed in a different way. You say 'heart' a lot in this poem and I think it would sound better if some of the times you described it more.
Wish I could have actually helped,
A. S.