The Mighty Have Fallen- Chapter 2

Ello, Im here to do a review. Feel free to tell me if i did anything wrong .
Ok lets get right into it then!.

"Every little kid has something weird they obsess over."

You should have put in "that" to structure the sentence properly.

"The only noise is the sound is that of the cars whipping by us on the highway

There should have been an " the only noise is the sound of cars whipping by us" that makes the sentence a whole lot easier for the reader to understand and this sentence just didn't make the reader understand.

"The closer we got to the airport, the more afraid I was that I would break in front of Scott. He was looking for any excuse to convince me to stay home, and even though he was trying to be supportive, really, really trying, I could see right through him, just as I was sure he could see right through me, but we both knew how important it was, what this would mean for me. "

This whole section/paragraph for me made me scared for the character and wishful that she wont break she will hold on till the bitter end and wont give up and that's what i really like about stories give me that edge, give me that oomph to a story that none dare to oomph!.

"I pulled away and his kissed my forehead ."

There is a quick spelling mistake and that is " his " when it should have been he kissed my
forehead.

As I stepped into the airport, the cold air conditioning hit me and I turned back to see Scott, still standing there, he gave me a small wave with his fingers before I turned and walked through the next door to departures.

this was truly sad i nearly shed a tear but i wont let it get to me come on leek stay together!. Will Scott ever come back? will they ever meet again?. All these questions need answering and i hope next chapter all these will be answered.

My final thoughts are quick grammar errors and spelling ones down the line but an amazing idea throughout and you focused and that idea had brought you to the light.

Great job