Leftovers

I'm back! Chilow for another review, here we go

After reading your other poems, I'm thinking that I was foolish to not have recognized such a unique style in your works... It was less noticeable in "9:00," but in both "Rocks" and "Paper Airplanes," it was clear that they were yours I always get a little giddy when I get to read peotry that so clearly has a unique style to as yours does because it makes it all the more interesting to read, regardless of content (Though your content makes it somehow even more incredible )
All I can ever thing of after reading works like these is that I am witnessing the early works of a soon to be famous poet or author, who will in the future be known as a forerunner in their field. I might be overreacting, but that's just how I see it

The whole poem is really just fantastic, as usual, but two lines really stick out to me for some reason;

"Shattered rainbows,

reflecting off slivers of the CD."

^ Something about this just pops out at me and I love everything that my (admittedly hyperactive) mind comes up with in response. The imagery, the symbolism, the /everything/! You certainly have a way with words, and I think that, for me at least, these two lines really make the poem that much better.

The only thing for me would be more a question rather than a imperfection, as I think I'm just not bright enough to see the message in it. In the last few lines;

"This is all that remains.

And if I’m being honest,

I don’t mind them at all."

^Do you not mind the reminders, or the fact that the person that these things remind you ofis presumably gone? That's my only "complaint," if it can be called that Otherwise, fantastic job, yet again I love your poetry and I can't wait to read (and review) more of it! Keep it up

(Do I need a disclaimer at the top of this to warn readers of excessive exclamation mark and smiley face usage?)

Heya, TheColoroftheSky! I'm here to review your entire portfolio!
Anyway, yeah. Like last time I'll be doing this from the good and the bad! So, just sit tight and I'll see what I can get out of this!
the first thing- it was an okay poem. I know I know it's not the best- but I did kinda like it.
Okay, that being said- I'm afraid it's to the bad(Or the nitpicks, errors, flaws, or whatever you want to call them. I have no preference.)
The first thing I noticed was the flow.
Examples:
"The image of your ocean eyes

and eager smile."
I got to thinking,"Okay, hmm, so this is supposed to be long and slow? Cool!"
The I get to the line right below it," Some music." These two lines do not go together AT ALL. It's like you're switching from listening to Rap music to listening to Classical. They don't flow correctly.
The other example I have of this is the ending lines,"A poem.

This is all that remains.

And if I’m being honest,

I don’t mind them at all."
"A poem," has that blunted, rather.. toneless flow to it, then it picks up. It doesn't fit with the previous lines nor the following. It's rather.., Bland in my opinion.
In all honesty I loved the idea of this poem. It's something I've never thought of before- and it's completely raw and AMAZING. I think you should till it, pluck the good seeds in it, plant said seeds for regrowth, and try again. I'm pretty sure your harvest, the fruits of your labor, would be a lot sweeter if you would try to do this again.
The other thing that bothered me was the shortness of the poem. I've seen a lot of your other things- this is practically non existent when it comes to length compared to them. I know you, and I know your writing style- this has the potential to go A LOT farther than what you've done with it here.
Anyway- I'm not gonna burn myself out on on review so I'm gonna end it here. I'll have the rest done in a few minutes- I'm off to get coffee so I can finish your portfolio.
Keep writing and keep on keeping on.
With love- Matthew Casanova Aaron.

I really love when poems are simple and beautiful, yet the story behind it is complex and chaotic, I love the contradiction. The words you use are beautiful, they took me somewhere and left me with all the leftovers you showed us.

I know this is me simply gushing... but I cant really say anything other than: Amazing work!

I'll always love poems with this sort of emotion, this is a lovely piece of work. You have a style to your poems, that's the greatest gift a reader can ask for!

thank you, I really enjoyed this.

Hey, well done for writing this, because I think it's beautiful. I love how at first sight, this poem seems so simple, but yet it has complexity beneath. My favourite poems are ones that make you think, and this one definitely does. I also really like the choice of title, because when I saw it, I wanted to see what this poem was about. The thing I love the most about this poem is the imagery. It paints a great picture in your head, and the lines flow together so well.

Well done again for this poem, and I'll definitely read more of your work.

Hello, thecolorofthesky!!

This is Eros here to rview this sweet poem!!

This is a very short and very sweet poem. It has a depth of meanings in it. I liked the theme of this piece of poetry.

So I am, first of all commenting on the title. The title is, indeed, very attractive, captivating and catchy. It suits the poem. Just a little suggestion though, just hit the space bar in between 'Left' and 'overs'.

The next thing is the theme. It has a very unique and simple theme. I like how you have expressed simple things in a artitic way. The poem has painted good image of the things which are left over:
The scent of the lemons, the image of the eyes.
Then, I wanna say few words for your style of writing. Your style of writing is easy to understand. Your style has a nice flow of the speech.

The choice of set of the words that you have used is the main thing which provides the sweetness to this sweet poem.
The length of the poem also adds up to the sweetness of the poem. I especially liked the adjectives you have used:
ocean eyes
vague scent
eager smile...

Beautiful piece!

I gotta read something new.

It was an AWESOME poem.

Keep writing...
Never cease...
Because we all love to keep reading such sweet works like this one.
Have a great day/night/evening!