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Hello there! I'm here to bring this out of the green room for you

So before I even sit down to read this piece, I can already tell it's deeply personal. I see there at the bottom in your author's note that you're not intending to revisit or revise, that you just wanted to get it out. I totally get that. Writing is so therapeutic and it's such a good outlet for getting out painful feelings. I admire you for not only doing that, but for being brave enough to share it in a public space. You're welcome to post future pieces of this nature (should you ever write something like this again) in the publishing center, but if you don't want to spend 200 points on it, you could also post it on your YWS blog or in a forum post or something like that. Publishing center pieces are designed for critiques and revision, but it's okay that you posted it here

Onwards!

Well I hope you don't encounter anyone that judges you for writing this. This is a very powerful and emotional piece and it obviously comes straight from your heart (and please, if someone ever says something insensitive or rude to you on this site, don't hesitate to contact someone in green about it!). It actually takes courage to write a piece like this because you have to confront all of the painful things on your heart. It takes even more courage to give others a window into that pain.

I'm not going to critique anything about the writing because I don't think that's what you're looking for here and honestly, I don't think it would be helpful I don't know if anyone in your real life (like family members) know how you feel or how much you're suffering, but if you have family members you trust, I would encourage you to share this with them if you're comfortable. I'm glad you have an awesome boyfriend and friends you can share with, but there might be some people in your family that would appreciate knowing how you feel too. But I don't know. I don't know you or very much about your situation, so you do what feels right to you. I would also encourage you to continue to write about this and continue to find a way to get your feelings out about this. You might want to look into finding a counselor or someone in your area that you can talk to about this too because you shouldn't have had to go through all of this stuff

Keep your head up, and keep on writing, and let me know if you need anything else! My PM box is always open <3

Damn son.

wow

wow

One thing I have to say is this is amazing. Thanks for opening up to me... and other people. I know it's painful and it takes a lot of effort, but I'm very proud of you. I wouldn't change anything out of this.

Hi Steam <3

Writing is one of the best outlets for pain I know. When I first started writing seriously, I was a sophomore in high school and hugely depressed. Like you, I needed a way to get the things I was feeling out of my head and somewhere I could look at it and hold it and start to rearrange it to understand how I felt. It's very brave of you to share this as a literary work on YWS. Thank you for trusting us.

I know you say you don't want to revisit this or edit it, which I definitely respect. I don't know that we've ever crossed paths on YWS before, but I just wanted to drop by with a review to encourage you to keep putting yourself on paper like this (whether you share it with others or not). Emotion (especially, but not only, pain) from real life experience is some of the strongest writing fodder there is. And you have some really beautiful images here:

When your parents don't show up to anything that you do because their parents didn't show up either. They don't realize they are not their parents, that they can change.

I hate him, I hate him too much for my body to handle.

Pain isn't just felt physically, but also felt verbally.