Like all life we are born with a bang whether the beginning is a baby screaming without knowing why, or a mass explosion of heat.If it is there it has been born and will one day die,It may be a shrill scream in a place where no one hears or even cares,or it may be the ancient croak that cap's off the life of a withered star.We will continue on despite the evil mind's that feed their greed with human lives but we will grow weary and so will the sun to the point of a tired whimper.Life will drain but at the last second you will understand why you must finally rest and let your energy flow downwards into the oblivion you escaped from at birth.We are born with a bang but the shadows of time will cause a long final whimper to ease the fatigue of life.
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Earlier, I read "Behind the Curtain", and loved it. I decided to look at one of your other works to see if it was as good, and I was not dissapointed. This is great. I've always heard that things should end witha bang, but i never thought that things could also start with a bang. You have real talent to be able to write like this. There are a few grammatical errors spread throughtout, but nothing that cannot be fixed by a quick proofreading. You are a fantastic writer, andI look forward to reading more.
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