You linger behind the curtain.A curtain that is closed only to you.You indulge in your fantasies yet you fear the gloom of your realities.But they smile with the love that you deny the legitimacy of .You fear the truth but you censor your doubts.You are a fool for the ignorance of it all but they would understand.At least you think...
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Wow. This planted ideas in my head that I will be thinking about for a while. Your wording is fantastic, and everything written is true. This is really a very philosophical piece. However, I do have some critiques. In the second sentence, there should be a comma after 'yet'. Next, try never to start a sentence with a conjunction. It seems as though your third sentence is incomplete, so I would fix that. I am slightly confused by the fourth sentence. Who is they? I really like how you finish everything off with "At least you think..." Definetly a smart move. Once again, this is really awesome!
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