Young Writers Society

Hey slubbs! I'm here with a review. :)

This is a really good story! I love the air of ~mystery~ and the shortness of it makes it even better somehow. Overall, it's just amazing!

The cold trampoline surface launches chills up their backs.

The boy stretches his arm out and points towards the sky, a slight rainbow begins to form above them.

“How does something so beautiful appear after a storm,”

She tucks her blonde hair behind her ears,

Wow, this was a great short story and as a matter of fact, it's my first short story I've read here on this website and thanks for making it a great one!

But what I really loved about your story is kind of what some of the other people in the comments have been posting, you didn't draw it out longer than it needed to be and every word in there had a meaning to it.

Anyway, I really liked your story and hope to read more of your work soon!

Have a great day,
Arianna

Hi, RandomTalks here for a quick review.

Your story was short and sweet, but what I really like about it is that every word you used had an impact of it's own. I don't know what is going to happen to the best friends to drive them apart but I almost wish I could stop them, and that is really surprising, because with only a single exchange between them, you already feel connected to these two people.

'“How does something so beautiful appear after a storm,” the boy says in awe.'

I really liked this line and the depth if inner meaning it contained. It didn't feel forced or even cheesy, but like something the boy was genuinely wondering about. My only suggestion here would be to put a question mark after 'storm', but that's just my opinion!

Overall, this was a really good and powerful little story and I hope to read more of your works. Have fun with your writing and stay safe!

Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),

Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!

First Impression: Hmm...was just randomly scanning and saw this little story so I thought I would drop in...soo..

Anyway let's get right to it,

She trails her fingers over the dry tears that lie on her cheeks, redness still loiters around her eyes. The cold trampoline surface launches chills up their backs.

The boy stretches his arm out and points towards the sky, a slight rainbow begins to form above them. “How does something so beautiful appear after a storm,” the boy says in awe.

The girl smiles and realizes she’s going to be all right. She tucks her blonde hair behind her ears, “sometimes you need a storm to create the beauty,” she claims while giggling. They make eye contact and burst out laughing both knowing they have little time left with their best friend.