Hey Shusher
I really like the lightness of this poem. I find that poetry has the ability to convey emotion but many writers tend to forget that this means the whole range of emotions not just the dark and heavy stuff. So this feels like a breath of fresh air. I don't think poetry always needs to have a point sometimes it is better to just see where the idea will take you. It is very raw and unedited feeling which I like because it helps convey they feeling you are trying to express I think if you had started to go into the realm of too long or deep then you would have lost what fun light piece this is.
Keep up the good work!
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