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This piece is pretty old, but I thought I'd review it anyway, as it was really interesting.

So, I really enjoyed the rhyming in this, and the flow was good. Grammar and spelling, from what I saw, was good as well.
However, one stanza in particular,
""You suck"
"Is a request of confidence.
""You're garbage,"
"Is requesting some cadence"

That is not how you critique work. Being harsh and putting someone down are two VERY different things. You can tell them every little thing they're doing wrong, and nitpick every little detail, but you have to tell them how to fix it. Instead of saying "YOU suck" Or "YOU'RE garbage" Direct it at the work. Just keep in mind that people put a lot of work into poems/short stories/novels. Also, I don't know if you actually review like this, it's just what I thought about that stanza.
Anyway, the rest of the poem definitely paints the idea of you wanting to help someone better their writing, which is a really good overall message to have, and I feel that's why a lot of people came to this site, to improve.
So keep on writing, and have a great day!

Hi it's Izzy and welcome to YWS!

I thought this poem/lyrical piece was very funny and I thought very accurate!

And some people only see the negatives, or some people only see the positives.

Personally, I read it to the Twenty One Pilot's song "Holding On To You" and I enjoyed it very much!


Keep writing! And tag me next time you do!


Izzy

Thanks for sharing. I found myself chuckling through the whole read. Very nice rhyming! The rap style fits the subject just right. So many accurate observations about some real reasons which motivate negative criticism. A real masterpiece!

Actually, there are people who predominantly review in that way. All they claim to see is negatives and justify it by saying that it is the only way a writer can improve. Some might even announce proudly that they are about to be brutally blunt.

The only part I didn't understand is the it burns for memory part.