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Ode to the Witch at Moe's

by salia4


Evil, ugly, cruel.


Magical, beautiful,loving,


Welcome to Moe’s!

Taco salad, nachos

Quesadilla, tacos,

Made by one


Take your pick,

Luck, money,


Done by

Taught by


5 days a week

5 kids at home

5 hours of sleep

Bills, appointments


All done

By one,


A desert oasis

Full of life,

Full of energy,

Calm, collected,

A willow Tree

Beautiful, fragile


Healing, Strong

A mermaid,

Slender, graceful







Magical, beautiful,

Loving, strong



Witch at Moe’s

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9 Reviews

Points: 342
Reviews: 9

Sun Jul 14, 2019 4:14 pm
kingopossum wrote a review...

This poem seems very heartfelt! The rhythm is nice, and the whole thing flows well! I really enjoyed the beginning where you compare the media depiction of witches to the real thing, that was very powerful.

I have a couple of suggestions, but by no means do you have to implement them if you don't think they'd work quite right. In the third line where it says 'No,' I think adding a period to the end of no instead of a comma might make it seem more firm and more powerful. Another small suggestion I have is in the second to last line, which is just 'My,' you could maybe lengthen it just a bit. Maybe something like 'My very own,'

Other than those, I love the little details you put in. The types of food, the different spells, even the responsibilities that she held all help to get a picture of her. This was beautiful and I'm very glad I read it.

Keep writing, and have a good day -King

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Points: 38
Reviews: 20

Sun Jul 14, 2019 2:54 pm
Bhaavya Singh says...

The poem is depicting what mothers are beautifully. Metaphors are used perfectly. There are very minor mistakes, but as a whole the poem is wonderful. The way you have detailed the role of mothers, impressed me. I really loved to read it. I got emotional after reading it. The poem is perfectly written. The words have been selected selected appropriately which adds to its beauty.
This is really adorable. Please keep on writing such wonderful poems.

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Reviews: 264

Sat Jul 13, 2019 7:45 pm
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Horisun wrote a review...

This is a beautiful poem! It's really good!
There is two things that'd I would like to point out, and that's that you forgot a space in two places, "Cunning,Smart" and "Beautiful,loving"
Also, in one of the last lines, you didn't uppercase the m in mom, when everywhere else you did. It's a small detail, but for someone like me, it threw me off.

Other than those little nitpicks, this poem is great! I loved the theme, and the wording, and metaphors are wonderful! Keep on writing, and have a great day or night!

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