This is good. So I'm guessing the message is that you wrote to give yourself a reason to live, as per the time this was written? I think "Negotiate" should be "Negotiates" since it's death negotiating the benefits that you will reap in "the deal" (this is such a great couple of lines). And at the end you've already lost your presence and need to remind yourself of it. Relating typing online to life in death, to lunacy and rationality, to submerging and overcoming, is pretty impressive in my opinion. Also, did you draw that picture at the top?
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