It’s about time

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It’s about time

Red wire to yellow node and white wire to blue node. Or is the other way around? Maybe, maybe. But to hell with mayhap, I don’t have time for this. No, no. I need more time. More time to think.”

He repeated those words, over and over like a broken record eager to get things done. His hands which were smirched with oil inserted the wires into the circuit, placing them carefully. The scent of burned solder was in the air, fresh yet unpleasant. But to him, it was nothing compared to what he was going to do. It was just a small setback, nothing major. Just a small problem.

He winced as a small spark scalded his fingers, all marked with scars and even bleeding cuts. Some droplets of blood fell on the table as they trickled down his fingers, but it seemed he wasn’t paying much attention to himself. It was rather the device he was working on that caught most of his interest. It wasn’t finished yet, obviously. There some missing parts, some left uncompleted on his working table. He could perfect its design in one week, fully-functional and surely higher rate of success. Winter was almost near and he couldn’t take any chances. Even a slight change in temperature will affect its result and if it fails...well, let’s just say failure is not an option.

There were two LED lights attached to its side. One was blinking red, showing signs of problem, but the other was just dark and empty. There were two cylinders placed in the compartment, both labeled ‘flux capacitor’. They were crudely made as there were markings resulted from the blowtorch he used to weld the pieces together. It wasn’t exactly a beauty, but it would suffice for now.

Cooling port A into main circuit. Beam amplifier into circuit C. Time adjuster into circuit D.A few twigs here and there. And...voilà!” As he said those words, a soft humming began, softly at first. The LED lights were blinking madly, trying to process whatever information it was suppose to know. In the beginning, he expected it to fail by simply dying out with smoke seeping through its casing. But it worked! All was left now was the-

The fluorescent light above him blacked out, just as he expected. But his work now was done. All that was left now was a test run and tomorrow will be that day. “Look out everyone.” he spoke to the darkness. “I’m about to rewrite history”. He grinned with a delighted look on his face, aware that he meant it literally.

* * *

“Hydrogen, Helium, Lithium, Beryllium, Boron, Carbon, Nitrogen, Oxygen...”

He mumbled the elements according to the ascending order of the proton number under his breath as the wind rushed against him. He did this ever since he was introduced to science at the ripe age of eight whenever he felt worried or scared. Right now, he wasn’t sure whether it was fear or doubt that made him nervous. Maybe it was both. No, there is no turning back now, he thought to himself. Years of research will be wasted if he did. It was easy to get up to the top of the empire state building. You just have to show a fake ID with a tool box in your hand and the next thing you know, you’ll be in the elevator heading towards the highest floor with no one to watch you. The device in the backpack was, however, a slight problem to the plan. But it was nothing he couldn’t handle.

He placed the device on the steel roof, producing a slight ‘thud’ due to its weight. He calibrated the time circuit by turning a few knobs and pressed some buttons written in Roman number which he favored. If he had calculated correctly, at exactly 201 miles per hour with the exact momentum of 10,452kg m/s, exception of the frictional force, at the height of 10 meters above sea level, a small wormhole will appear for a short time period of 1.24s before the part of the torn fabric of universe heals itself, just enough for him to travel through the tunnel and into a completely new universe with a different timeline, assuming he had enough energy and speed to make it through. However, all of this precise calculations and assurance were simply based on pure theory that he made in his head. So, if the theory that he carefully and gently constructed is wrong, then the impulse force which would be probably around 174.2N, assuming that the time taken for him to reach the ground is 60s, will crush every single bone in his body and organs, resulting an immediate death. On the bright side, even if he failed, he wouldn’t feel any pain at all.

“…Rubidium, Rhodium, Palladium, Silver, Cadmium, Indium, Tin…”

Why a backpack? Why not make a time traveling machine out of a car or a jet if you simply need to go fast in order to go through the wormhole? Good question. The problem was that if you take an object with a lower mass and another with a higher mass, and throw them into a wormhole, the molecules of the larger mass will have a harder time to arrange themselves back into their lattice when the objects appeared on other end of the tunnel. Well, that’s what his theory says after all. He slung the device over his back, strapped it and walked towards the edge. He had calibrated the time circuit to take him to 20 November 1963 at 21:24:03PM. If not, God help him.

“…Livermorium, Ununseptium and the last but not least, Ununoctium.”

He took a deep breath, careful of his footing, and looked at the view before him. He could see the streets congested with cars and trucks. Lights in buildings shining brightly like sunlight reflected off a diamond. It was beautiful scenery and if he ever died from this experiment, he would be happy to at least enjoy this moment.

“Roads? Where I’m going, I don’t need roads.” he said to the sky, chuckling a little before taking a leap of faith with his hands extended to each side, reaching for the heavens and plunging down to the ground below.

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birk
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birk wrote a review · Wed Oct 16, 2013 12:43 am

Hey rotom!

Alright, science fiction. I love science fiction, so lets see what you got.

Well, you got an interesting setup. Its not too original, but it gets the reader interested in seeing how it turns out.

I'm hoping you continue this instead of keeping it as a short, your ending is really annoying.
So far, the story you do have is also very short. Its basicly just two-three quick scenes, with a really lackluster ending.

Alright, on to your main character: He has no character. Or a name. In fact, I'm gonna go ahead and call him Jeff.

So, the only character or character trait that Jeff has is mumbling or going over the chemical elements in his mind. Which for me only adds Rain Man. Its weird because we don't know Jeff at all.

Okay, I'll go over some points and grammatical errors as I go along:

“Red wire to yellow node and white wire to blue node.

About the worst way to bring readers into a story. I'm already bored. In fact, the entire first part of this story fails to interest me. Start with a bang, you need a good hook.

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There were some missing parts, and some left uncompleted on his working table.


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fully-functional and surely with a higher rate of success.


both labeled ‘flux capacitor’.

Great Scott!

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It took me a few minutes to figure out this myself. If you want these centered, simply highlight them and click "Alignment", choose "center text" from the dropdown menu and only the highlighted line will be centered.

He did this ever since he was introduced to science at the ripe age of eight whenever he felt worried or scared.
As I said earlier, this is a weird trait. I'd understand shaking or something similar, but without knowing anything about him or why, this just feels like Rain Man. I'd even accept expositions here, just to know more.

The problem was that if you take an object with a lower mass and another with a higher mass, and throw them into a wormhole, the molecules of the larger mass will have a harder time to arrange themselves back into their lattice when the objects appeared on other end of the tunnel
Alright, getting kind of interesting. But I'm starting to realize that this plan seems doomed to fail. First off, he hurls himself off the Empire State building on the off chance that he will hit this portal, that is, even if it opens or exists. In addition to this, its hard to be arranged back together on the other side? Isn't the human body one of the hardest things to replicate?

To be honest, I think you should hold back on the scientific details and expand on the story. Create an interesting character and send him through time. Sounds neat.

I do like the date you chose to go to though. I'm assuming you would end up with the JFK assasination, right?

“Roads? Where I’m going, I don’t need roads.”

Good! I approve this. I hope he brings plutonium though, if he ever wants to go back.

And there it ends.

Your grammar is solid and your writing style is pretty good. Just add more.
I hope you continue this story in some form, mate. Would be interesting to see what you cook up.

Cheers
Birkhoff

What a cliff hanger.
But anyways, let's get on to the review.
Firstly, I saw little to no grammatical or spelling errors, but this sentence caught my eye: "They were crudely made as there were markings resulted from the blowtorch he used to weld the pieces together." I feel that you should put a comma after "They were crudely made", as the viewer comes to a natural pause when reading it.
Next, this sentence: "If he had calculated correctly, at exactly 201 miles per hour with the exact momentum of 10,452kg m/s, exception of the frictional force, at the height of 10 meters above sea level, a small wormhole will appear for a short time period of 1.24s before the part of the torn fabric of universe heals itself, just enough for him to travel through the tunnel and into a completely new universe with a different timeline, assuming he had enough energy and speed to make it through." It's quite the run-on. Try to cut it into two to four separate sentences. Also, you could try writing out the full unit, such as "1.24 seconds" (etc.), since using the shorthand is usually used for notes, not thoughts.

I liked all your scientific theories and all your worked out details; it made it a more lifelike story for me. I hope to see a follow-up, as I'm curious to see why he wants to go back to November 20, 1963, at specifically that time.

-Bacon

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Dreamy
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Dreamy wrote a review · Tue Oct 15, 2013 12:03 pm

Aw, why did you stopped there? I wanted to know what happened.

Hey there, Dreamy here to review.

Let me start the review with a truth, I don't really like this sci-fic stuff. It's so ironic that for a physics major student like me to not to like sci-fic. But guess what I totally liked your story. It was like watching a movie on the edge of the seat. You are a very good narrator Tom, I guess your narration is what made me like your story. I just got one thing that has to be cleared.

His hands which were smirched with oil inserted the wires into the circuit, placing them carefully.


I just didn't get this line. And your answer about the masses was agreeable too :P Other than that. this was really a very good story. Keep up your good work. Will be looking forward for your other works too. And is this the end of this story? If not, post the end soon. :D

Keep writing!!!
Cheers!!! :D



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