Radrook here a once again to offer some suggestions.
Apologies if i offend. It isn’t my intention.
Please feel full free to cast aside all things you deem not helpful.
But if you do be sure its true by being extra careful.
That having been said:
First, please note that I like your poem and consider it very-well written. You are definitely a very skilled poet and I consider you a far better poet than I might ever chance to be despite my fervent efforts. I do like the concept of humans being like maps that are folded in secrecy.
Indeed the seemingly simple person whom we might encounter briefly and who seems uninteresting and having little to offer would prove a fascinating study on closer inspection. We do all have so much to tell and it would certainly be wonderfully if we could objectively share many of our private experiences with others.
However, there is the conundrum. Privacy! Even when humans deign to share things with others they still feel the urgent need to keep vast areas reserved for only their own eyes to see.
As you say, we are all like maps that have as yet been unexplored wit vast as yet unexplored regions, continents seas, islands valleys and mountain ranges. We are all Atlantises of sorts, ever beyond the reach of discovery but the difference is that Atlantis was described while our details remain a mystery and very often no one even notices that we exist or takes very little note that we existed at all. Atlantis has a reputation which engenders interest while we might engender evasion.
Also, not all of us share the desire to have others probe into the recesses of our deepest thoughts. Most of us cherish our privacy and would fight fiercely to protect it. In fact, anyone striving to probe too deeply into our affairs is usually viewed as an intruder and treated accordingly. Those who insist are tagged as nosey or having malicious ulterior motives.
If indeed someone is to derive comfort then humans prefer to choose which areas of their inner landscapes will be used to provide that comfort. In short, a map is indeed design to provide guidance for those on a journey. In fact, its sole purpose is to provide such guidance and there is nothing wrong with using it as such. But can we really compare ourselves to such a map? Would not that be a false analogy because of the discrepancies that arise? That is the issue that came to my mind as I read the poem.
The cities with unpronounceable names are kept that way on purpose. Unexplored realms are purposefully deemed best unexplored by prying eyes for a reason. That is what I am saying.
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