Soul's Decay : Chapter Four

by mephistophelesangel

Published January 22, 2014

16+ Violence

In Soul's Decay

Warning: This work has been rated 16+ for violence.

Chapter Three

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“Buenos días, mucho gusto. ¿ Cómo se llama usted?”

Mr. Macdonald spoke fluently, writing the greeting down on the whiteboard, and turned around to face the class. About half of them were dozing off, and a boy with piercings dangling from his nostrils, ears and lips was trying to hit an unsuspecting girl’s head with balled up worksheets. Some were eying the spot where the picture of a woman used to be hesitantly. They had asked the question minutes before ; “Where’s the picture, Mr. Macdonald?” and Mr. Macdonald had frowned and replied in Ancient Greek to shut them up.

Outside, the afternoon sun was extending tendrils of light towards Mr. Macdonald. You don't belong here,, it seemed to say. You don't belong here, creature of the void...

Mr. Macdonald glared back at the sun, walked over to the teacher’s desk and slammed down on it with a hand. If he didn’t know better, he would have deduced that the old, wooden desk had just broke in half. The class jumped, and became deathly quiet. The boy with the piercings slowly set down the crumpled worksheet on his desk, gulping, and tried to look like he was paying attention. Mr. Macdonald felt his eyes flash silver for a second, and he mentally bit himself, hard. “Could someone tell me what I just said?”

A quick look around the classroom told him that nobody was going to answer the question anytime soon. His grip on the edge of the desk tightened, and he heard the wood crack under his hands. With a sigh, he removed it just as quickly. “That meant, good morning, nice to meet you. How are you?”

Nobody talked, but they all stared at him as if he was a ghost from their strangest dreams. The silence was eerie, only broken occasionally by faraway sounds of students chatting, birds chirping and water running. Suddenly, the classroom seemed to be getting uncomfortably hot. Piercing Boy flinched visibly when the crumpled worksheet dropped down onto the floor and rolled forward until it stopped right next to the girl sitting in front of him.

Mr. Macdonald walked back to the whiteboard and hit it lightly with his palm. The sound echoed around the room. “Well? You just learned a new sentence. Stick it in your useless brains and say it.”

“Buenos días, mucho gusto. ¿Cómo se llama usted?” A single voice broke the silence, and Mr. Macdonald looked at the source of the voice with a wide smile. It was a small girl, who looked like she belonged to middle school rather than West Liverpool high. She gulped, and hesitantly smiled back.

Excelente! What was your name again?” The look the girl gave him was something that humans would direct at a person who was trying to pray for a flood in middle of a desert. Her voice was much smaller when she finally replied with a frown. “Um... Kendra, sir? Kendra Atkinson?” Abel smiled even wider. “Yes, Kendra. Thank you for actually listening to your teacher.”

Some students shifted nervously in their seats, stealing a glance or two at each other. Mr. Macdonald gave them a pointed look, and erased everything on the whiteboard. His hand paused for a moment, before it scribbled down a new sentence. His back turned to the class, he grinned slightly, just a hint of sharp teeth showing before he put it away.

“Zorro de las nueve colas.” Mr. Macdonald exclaimed, throwing his marker to the side. It clattered on the floor and rolled away into a crack. The students gave him a confused look. Mr. Macdonald stared at them, and not being able to see any comprehension on their faces, sighed heavily. “Does anybody know what I just wrote? Anyone?”

“Nine foxes?” A boy guessed, his eyebrows furrowed together, and Mr. Macdonald nodded sharply. “Próximo. Anyone have any other guesses? Hmm?”

“Tails.” An Asian girl murmured, and squinted at the board. “Tails… Nine… Fox. Nine… tailed fox.”

Mr. Macdonald looked at her, and nodded in confirmation. Her eyes brightened, and a wide smile of disbelief broke out on her face. Mr. Macdonald couldn’t help but notice, there was a tinge of fear in her eyes, behind the joy of knowing the answer to a question nobody else was bright about.

Gumiho! Zorro de las nueve colas… that means gumiho, the mythological nine-tailed fox in Korean, Japanese and Chinese mythologies!”

“Good, very good, Ms...?”

“Su Min, Mr. Macdonald.” Su Min answered with a small frown, but it soon disappeared. Mr. Macdonald grinned at her, and scanned the class with a gleam in his eyes. “Si! She is very, very right! Nine-tailed fox, otherwise known as gumiho, kyuubi, etc, etc. And how did you know that, Su Min?”

“Well, I am Korean, and most Koreans are familiar with the concept of gumiho. Also,” She seemed to ponder whether or not to say whatever she was going to say next. Her fingers started to nervously tap against her thigh, and most of the student body rolled their eyes, as if saying, I got tired of her crap a long time ago. Mr. Macdonald felt a sudden chill go down his spine, but nodded at her to continue with a sly smile. “...Also, my parents used to say that our ancestors were Sa-Nyang-Kuns. In English, Hunters.”

Mr. Macdonald’s blood ran cold. He could feel his claws reappearing on his hands, and his heart started to beat in his ears. Thump - Thump - Thump - Su Min continued, unaware of her teacher’s transformation, which was blocked from her sight with the teacher’s desk.

“They kinda named themselves that. They actually believed that the nine-tailed foxes existed and was a danger to humanity, so they hunted them down with hunting dogs, guns and amulets written with cow blood. I think that mother used to mention that, one time, one of my ancestors, a Hunter, managed to catch a nine-tailed fox. He died days after, but he boasted his achievement to his town and burned the corpse in front of the people he could gather. So... yeah… my ancestors apparently being Hunters and my race. Korean.”

She finished breathlessly, a proud smile on her face, and looked at Mr. Macdonald for a reply. His breathing was erratic. Hunters. They are here - no, they’re not here. But she’s a Hunter. Is she? Does her ancestry make her a Hunter?

“Mr. Macdonald?” Su Min asked, worry clear in her voice. Now, everybody was staring at him. Mr. Macdonald took a deep breath, while willing his hand to go back into a human state. He gave the class a tense smile. “Very... very good, Su Min. That story certainly was interesting.”

“Thank you, Mr. Macdonald!” The girl grinned at her Spanish teacher, and watched him as he shakily erased the words on the whiteboard. She couldn’t help but notice a hint of golden fur on his thumb, which glinted beautifully in the sunlight. But it can’t be. Mr. Macdonald has brown hair, not gold… Shaking her head to clear it, Su Min returned to doodling on her Spanish worksheet.

A cafe in Canada was full of laughter and many people who wanted a good morning coffee, in which an old man sat. Classical music was playing - a nice mix of piano and violin. Pleasant smell of coffee wafted into his nose, and he hummed lightly, smiling. He reached forward to mix his own cappuccino that was sitting in front of him with a small, silver spoon, before leaning back in the wooden chair again. The world has gotten better, as always. With a content sigh, he looked down at his wrist, checked the time briefly, and waited.

The doors to the cafe burst open, and a young man stormed through the crowd to a certain table. He brushed past a young couple, and they gave him a look before returning to gazing into each other’s eyes. The old man raised his head, and his lips formed into a welcoming grin. Shaking his head, the young man looked around him with hostility and disgust. Finally, he directed his gaze back to his senior.

“Tom.” He greeted, his gaze softening as he took in the old man.

“I see that you have gained yet another tail, Mason.” Tom replied with well-deserved respect, and motioned for Mason to sit down in front of him with a nod. With lighthearted frown, Mason roughly pulled out a chair and plopped himself down.

The classic music took on a high, quick-paced pitch.

“What is it? I am running short on time. Is it about Abel?”

“Oh, yes, the maniac. No.”

“Then what?” Mason muttered, glaring at a nearby table which was louder than he would have preferred. His eyes flashed gold. A passing waiter gave him a nervous look, carrying a plastic tray with five coffee mugs balanced upon it on his hand, before he shook his head and walked away briskly.

Tom wordlessly held up a handle of a dagger, two sets of Chinese letters, written in cow blood, on both sides of the hilt.

A strangled gasp tore itself free from Mason’s throat. He made a wild grab for the handle, cleanly detached from its blade, and Tom let it go without a tinge of hesitation. Mason’s fingertips hovered above the letters, and reluctantly, he let them make contact with one of it. Immediately, recognition flashed in his eyes, and he pulled his hand back with an animal-like hiss.

The offending object dropped from his grasp, and Tom moved forward with inhuman speed to snatch it out of the air before it could fall onto the table. Their eyes made contact, and Mason nodded silently.

“So they’re back…” He growled, putting his face in his hands. His eyes slid shut, and he shook his head, as if it was going to create a gateway for him to rush out of the painful reality. Tom soon followed suit, silently setting the handle down onto the table, his cappuccino long since forgotten.

“They’re back to hunt.” Tom agreed grimly. Silence continued between the two, long and stretched. Mason absently fingered a necklace that hung around his neck, the pendant - a small, glass jar -supported by a long, leather string. The jar contained a single strand of shining, white fur.

Finally, he looked up to find Tom already staring at him. What is that in his eyes? Mason wondered sardonically. Desperation? Fear? Hope? Grief? What is it?

“Drink your cappuccino before it gets cold.” Mason spoke lowly, not making any move to get up and leave like he clearly wanted to. Tom took a sip of his drink, which he had just noticed existing, with a sad smile.

“It already has gotten cold and cheap, Mason. Better to not drink it.”

“Hmm.”

Another silence settled down on the table, and Mason shifted with newfound nervousness, his sharp, green eyes darting from side to side, searching for any possible threats. Tom noted the fact, and looked down at the handle of the dagger, a heavy hopelessness behind his aged eyes.

Mason gave the dagger’s hilt yet another icy look, hatred flooding his eyes, before he gained enough strength and willpower to stand up. The chair made a long, screeching sound on the wooden floor as it was pushed back. “I better go. And... warn the others.”

“Yes. A millennium’s a long time to forget.” Tom agreed. In his mind, he thought that maybe, they were overreacting. Maybe they didn’t need to go into hiding again, not yet. Nevertheless, he visualized the yet another bloodshed that was possible - not certain, but possible, and that was just enough - and shivered violently.

The younger man, perhaps only in his physical appearance, studied Tom knowingly as if he knew what thoughts were running through the old man’s mind. He pushed his chair in, and tossed three, crumpled dollar bills onto the table, finalizing their meeting. “Buy a new one. Who knows when you’ll get to have another?”

“Thank you, Mason.”Tom replied. Mason stood there for another good minute. During his wait, he made a move as if he was going to step forward and sit back down, but spun around instead. A side had obviously won his inner turmoil.

“They killed my brother, Tom.” The man said stiffly, his nails growing into claws and digging into his palms. Blood dripped down onto the floor. Tom looked up, surprised. He had expected Mason to leave without another word.

“But they won’t kill me. And they won’t kill you.” His hand went up to his neck and grabbed the tiny jar on his necklace. Before Tom could utter another word, Mason practically sprinted away. Tom stared at the dagger hilt, left behind on the table, and let out a snarl of disgust. He slipped it into one of the pockets in his worn out jacket, and reached forward to take the three dollar bills into his hands. A bitter smile twisted his lips.

A cappuccino sounded good.
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Snowery
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Snowery wrote a review Review · Apr 20, 2014

Hey!! Silver here!!

Urgh! Everyone else has stolen all the nit picks!! Nooo!!

Haha! Anyway,I really enjoyed this chapter. I love the way you structured it, starting off by introducing the concept of Hunters through Su Min before saying that they're back through Tom later n the chapter. That was really clever. As usual you have amazing imagery and I can alway visualise everything that's going on. I'm really liking the direction you're taking this story as well. Sorry I wasn't much help this time :/

Silverlock

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Deanie wrote a review Review · Feb 23, 2014

Hello! Must be tired of me hanging around huh?

I'm afraid this is going to be a short review. I am going to be a bit harsh about it. I would like to say that as usual your style is pitch perfect. The dialogue flows well, and although you're interesting new characters, you've made Mason seem so interesting I'm stuck wanting to hear more about him.

There is only one problem I have with this chapter. And that is...

you introduced new characters.

You did clarify them, they're the hunters, yeah yeah yeah. But the thing is, I haven't heard from Annabelle since the second chapter. Or Beverly, or many other characters that we met at the beginning. We still don't know what it was like when Beverly's friend went to the funeral, and how it went down. There were so many things you started, but didn't finish because you introduced more people! Like here! They're too many individual stories and characters, I'm beginning to forget their names and feel overwhelmed.

As well as the fact that there aren't enough connections between all of the situations, so to me I still feel like I'm reading multiple short stories. Not the best effect you want for a novel. So really, I'm not going to say anything is wrong with this chapter. You're two problems are just that there are too many characters, and not enough tie-ins for me to be hooked in this story for much longer.

But... I'll still go read more xD

Deanie x

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GoldFlame wrote a review Review · Jan 26, 2014

Flame here on this fine review day...

I haven't read the previous chapters, so my review is based solely off this one. Frees up room to take a look at your actual writing :D.

Writing clearly comes naturally to you. Flawless fluency (I've been aching to use that consonant phrase for a long time), humor was delicately folded into the solemnity, and only the most minor grammar mistakes caught my eye. Haven't read your previous chapters, but the exposition is developing nicely.

Just a few minor nitpicks...

"¿ Cómo..."


No need for a space.

About half of them were dozing off, and a boy with piercings dangling from his nostrils, ears and lips was trying to hit an unsuspecting girl’s head with balled up worksheets.


This comes off a bit confusing. Maybe break it down into a couple sentences, and add an Oxford comma. I know that the Oxford comma is unnecessary, but it helps clear things up a bit.

The lazy afternoon sun was blaring into the classroom, and the bright tendrils of light seemed to glare at Mr. Macdonald. You don’t belong here, they would have murmured if they could speak. You don’t belong here, creature of the void.


I love the foreshadowing, but it seems kind of...thrown in there. I also caught some accidental rhyming and repetition. Maybe: "Outside, the afternoon sun was extending tendrils of light towards Mr. Macdonald. You don't belong here,, it seemed to say. You don't belong here, creature of the void."

His grip on the edge of the desk tightened, and he heard the wood crack under his hands.


That must be very delicate wood?

...when the roll of paper...


What roll of paper?

"Thank you for demonstrating your knowledge and actually listening to your teacher."


This comes off a bit forced. Thank you for demonstrating your knowledge? I'd recommend just cutting that out, so...: "Thank you for actually listening to your teacher."

“Tails.. Nine.. Fox. Nine.. tailed fox.”


Ellipses contain three periods. Period. If they conclude a sentence, though, then they have four periods. Well, still technically three, with a period after.

Wait, wait, wait--nine-tailed fox sounds familiar :D. Mephistophelesangel mentioned it in the forums. Either Korean, Japanese, or Chinese? Has to eat a thousand livers to become a god? You definitely got me excited!

In the movies she watched, every single characters passed off those weird, tiny facts as ‘a trick of the light’, ‘seeing things’, etc...Let the movie characters stay stupid. She would definitely not make the same mistake as them.


Okay, this isn't a nitpick. I just want to say that I love this. Perfect. You've definitely hooked my attention now.

A classical music...


A classical music? You mean "classical music" or "a type of classical music?"

...café...


Oh, by the way, "café" has a little accent. Microsoft Word will automatically make the change, but I'm guessing that this website doesn't.

...young man stormed through the crowd to a certain table...


A certain table? What made that table so special? So unique? Maybe "a young man shoved towards a table [insert preposition][insert location]"?

...well-reserved respect...


Well-deserved, you mean?

Four millennium’s...


The correct term would be "millennia." "Millennia" is also plural, so "is" should be swapped for "are."

"Who knows when you’ll get to have another.”


The period should be replaced with a question mark.

“But they’ll not kill me. And they’ll not kill you.”


Should be "they won't kill."

...a man silently looked...


The adjective and verb don't really relate. I'd recommend just cutting out the adjective.

And that's all I have. This was honestly very well-written. Keep up the good work! Looking forward to more!

Thank you for your review! Oh, the wood cracking part? That's because the man is inhumanly strong, because he's a nine-tailed fox. No offense, but I laughed at the 'Delicate wood' part. Again, no offense at all.

Your corrections are very helpful! Thank you so much!

No problem! That makes a lot more sense now :D...

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horrendous wrote a review Review · Jan 23, 2014

horrendous, here for a review.

this story was pretty good. the plot made me think of Wolf's Rain, which is good because that show is amazing and this story has enough original material going for it to keep it fresh.

some nitpicky stuff:

The look the girl gave him was something that humans would direct at a person who was trying to pray for a flood in middle of a desert.


this line is kind of long and clunky, could be compressed

An old man sat in a cafe in Canada, full of laughter and people


the way this sentence reads, the man in the cafe is full of laughter and people. might just be me.

His heart beating wildly himself,


inside himself, perhaps? if so, in his chest would work better

“So they’re back…”

He growled


this should be on one line. this happened in several places. makes me confused as to whether the character growled his dialogue, or spoke and then growled.

more deeper


more deeply.

and why is the last part in italics?

those things aside and without reading previous chapters, this is a good story with a lot of potential.

First, thank you so much. Second : I'll take your edits/suggestions into consideration, because I do think that I should fix that.

The last part is in italics because... it's a bit hard to explain, but in the previous chapters, I put those italic parts in for a twist.



You can, you should, and if you’re brave enough to start, you will.
— Stephen King