Published March 17, 2013
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Hello there!
to start off, I must say that I was definitely a fan of this. Just the way it was written reminded me of one of my only preferred "dark" poets Edgar Allan Poe. Generally I don't care for darker/ depressing pieces, but I'll give yours an exception.
The choice of words here was strong yet also ha some kind of rhythm to them, and that's what I liked. I liked the use of the words "dreary" and "forevermore" especially because it reminds me of the Raven. In this case it's "forevermore" though.
Anyway, I don't have much criticism to offer. :O My only advice is to keep penning... You've got some potential there.
Hey
but just saying that sometimes easier words carry the meaning better. Anyways i really did like it, i wish i was longer ! 
It had basically everything a good poem needs .. a sportlane kind of thing , literaly devices , some rhymes and rythm. Very nice 
So i really liked it. The dark feeling in it and the interesting choice of words. I see you have used a theasorus