Published March 17, 2013
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Hi Mattimias, I have come to review your work!
I have to say, when i first pulled up this page and I saw how short your poem was, I thought it wasn't going to be very good. Because a lot of really short poems aren't very good. But was I wrong!
This is the most beautiful, shortest, most amazing poem I've read here on YWS!
I don't understand the ending though. What does that have to do with the rest of the poem? Was it placed there simply because of your hidden code?
And I am very interested in what this code is, for I cannot see it.
I don't think you have any technical errors. So thats good.
This is extremely good for such a short poem. But as with all short poems, it would probably be better if it where longer. But it is perfectly fine as it is.
Amazing job! Keep up the good work.
~WW
That is beautiful! The hidden message is so sweet. Even without seeing the secret message, the poem by itself is amazing and you should be proud of it.
The only flaw I see is the fourth line. The word 'loves' throws me off a bit. I think 'love's' might make more sense, as the conjunction stands for 'love has'.
It's your poem, so don't feel the need to heed to any of this. I really like your poem. You should write more poetry. It is obvious that you have a talent here. Keep it up!