Sometimes

I really liked this piece, and I like that you didn't really do any rhyming. Some people tend to think that a poem needs to rhyme to be a poem, but in your case I think it strengthens the poem that you don't use the rhyming, because it sort of helps the feeling of frustration that I get from the piece. The frustration of not being sure that you're your own person before you're someone else's.

It's a very strong poem, and I think we can all relate to it in some way, to that feeling that you create so beautifully.

There is one thing, though, that I'm not so sure about, and that is the long sentences.

[Sometimes the places that tingle on my neck get to me and I think “that is his, and that is his, but am I mine anymore?”]

[But the relentless ache in my chest whispers to me when I am vulnerable and I miss the girl I was before you ever said that you loved me]

While the sentences are very beautiful, they also break up the rhythm of the poem, because when reading it, you are not really sure what to do with such a long sentence, not really sure how to fit that into the rhythm that you've created. It kills the flow of the poem a bit, and you need to read it out loud a few times, before you make the lines flow with the rest.

I LOVE the ending, and I think it's a very good way to end the poem on that note. It really sums up everything that you're trying to get out.

All in all, I really like the poem, and I like that you didn't go for the traditional poem of even lines, and rhyming patterns. That helps to create a chaotic feeling that match the feeling of the poem very well.

Thank you for sharing

I could feel the heaviness of this piece. It was beautiful in a very dramatic way. This is a reality we often missed. I really liked how short yet meaningful it was. This is a well-done writing.

"and I miss the girl I was before you ever said that you loved me."

It was a punch in my gut.

This is an amazing poem! I really like it. I can relate to it very well.
The last sentence is wonderful, and in a way sad and comforting at the same time.
The line "Sometimes I like to be lonely" is so strong and chilling. And I think it is something a lot of people feel sometimes without really realizing what or why they are feeling.
I really love this poem!

All I can say is that this poem is amazing as hell. So dramatic, which I loved. I love the story behind this poem too. It caught my attention right from the beginning. When I read the part: "Sometimes I take the path less travelled," I actually thought I was going to read a poem that kind of connects to Robert Frost's "The Road Not Taken." But as I read along, it was actually about your emotion, as if something happened to you or you experienced something that is heartwarming to the audience as they read it. Overall, this poem was great. I love it. Keep up your great work!