This poem is written to a woman
She is a really lovely human
She is my grandma the sweet
The person that never gives me the negative heat
She makes me happy
Not once did my grandmother made me feel sappy
Her cooking makes your stomach whopping for more
What can you say? she is my grandma
A person you can talk to about how you feel
It's the pain she can heal
When ever I am sad
She is there to give me a hug
She is pretty and fancy like a lady bug
So happy birthday
Happy birthday my majestic grandma
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it Should be Whenever.
Punctuation! But otherwise very good.!!!
Keep it up.
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Lord Anzius WUZ here
Thats a sweet poem.You need to put some puntuations thats the only thing which it lacks.
You could have extended the poem more I felt.
But never mind it was small and sweet.
In this stanza the negative heat part doesn't really go well,I wish you could just put something else in there.
Keep writing and posting.........
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it's sooooooooooooo cute ^_^
(although it seems a little bit unfinushed, but it's ok)
well, happy birthday to your granny
and i wish to you a great week :]
AWW. This was sweet.
I thought your ryhming felt a little forced. I would almost have liked this poem more if it didn't rhyme.
It was also in a very strange format. The stanzas where all over the page. Looked cool though.
What can you say? She is my grandma
"there"
The lady bug analogy seemed a little out of place, but I liked it.
Very nice poem. Has your grandmother read it?
-Sea-