Hi. These are my first set of lyrics posted on here. Any comments appreciated. 
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Verse One:
She smiles and it breaks your heart
The twinkle in her eyes tears you apart
Her laughter takes your breath away
She’s the one you want every single day
Chorus:
She’s a trapped butterfly, trapped butterfly
Waiting for someone, anyone to set her free
Let her spread her wings and dance in the sky
You love her, so dance with her, set her free
Verse Two:
She walks and you stumble, you fall
You hope that it’ll be your name she’ll call
Her accent leaves you dumbstruck
You always wonder if you will have the luck
Chorus:
She’s a trapped butterfly, trapped butterfly
Waiting for someone, anyone to set her free
Let her spread her wings and dance in the sky
You love her, so dance with her, set her free
(x2)
Bridge:
Spread your wings, dance in the sky
Clasp her hands, twist her around
Spread your wings, dance in the sky
Clasp her hands, twist her around
Spread your wings, dance in the sky
Clasp her hands, twist her around
Chorus:
She’s a trapped butterfly, trapped butterfly
Waiting for someone, anyone to set her free
Let her spread my wings and dance in the sky
You love her, so dance with her, set her free
Spread your wings, dance in the sky
Clasp her hands, twist her around
Clasp her hands, twist her around
Clasp her hands, twist her around
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Lisa
Listening to: 'Five Colours In Her Hair' by McFly. 
Hey =]
Aww - that was so nice! I'm not really that good at reviewing poetry or lyrics but this was really good.
The imagery was beautiful and it seemed to flow well =]
So yeah, this wasn't a very constructive review but I really liked it
*two thumbs up*
xDudettex
Bleeding Rose wrote:Absolutely beautiful. I cam up with my own tune to sing along with it though. I hope that is okay!
Lisa Absolutely beautiful. I cam up with my own tune to sing along with it though. I hope that is okay! I will prolly be singing this for a while now. How long have you been writing songs? You're really good. *Conceded moment* Almost as good as me! teehee. Joking. We are pretty close though.
Hey there Lisa! Welcome to YWS!
I will give a pointless review, only to support you, because for a first lyrics this is great! I absolutely loved it and I would like to see it with melody!
The only thing I thought that wasn't completely right:
She’s a trapped butterfly, trapped butterfly
Waiting for someone, anyone to set her free
Let her spread her wings and dance in the sky
You love her, so dance with her, set her free
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