I really like these ones. 
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Verse One:
The sun is shining outside
The rain can’t fall, even if it tried
The road’s paved in silver
And the smiles are made of glitter
Yeah
Chorus:
I’m on top of the world
And I love it, this feeling
I don’t want to fall down
Back to the cold ground
I’m on top of the world
Top of the world
Verse Two:
People are dancing around
They’re making the building pound
The music is playing loudly
And the stars are shooting freely
Yeah
Chorus:
I’m on top of the world
And I love it, this feeling
I don’t want to fall down
Back to the cold ground
I’m on top of the world
Top of the world
Bridge:
Top of the world
Top of the world
Hey
Top of the world
Top of the world
Hey
Top of the world
Top of the world
Hey
Chorus:
I’m on top of the world
And I love it, this feeling
I don’t want to fall down
Back to the cold ground
I’m on top of the world
Top of the world
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This one's really good too! I wish I could write lyrics as good as this
The road’s paved in silver
And the smiles are made of glitter - I love these lines! It's just so happy and positive =]
These lyrics are catchy and I reckon it would sound great with music too...I started humming my own made up tune to match the lyrics
I do agree with 'Krupp' though, in that the last line of the second verse doesn't really seem to fit. Other than that I think you've done a great job!
xDudettex
It was simple, and fun to read. I'm sure it sounds better when there's music playing to it, too.
Besides that, there is only one thing that I would consider fixing if I were you, and that is the final line in Stanza/verse 2/whatever it is about stars shooting freely. It doesn't fit in that particular part, and I think it just seems to come from nowhere. If you fix that, otherwise this is pretty nice and well-done.