The Forgotten Smile

hey krish
well , i wanna say that i usualy don't review short stories , but your work is so attractive , especially the title
( maybe because it include my name ) , anyway i enjoyed reading your story so much .
ok so this story is so sad and full of emotions , it's so touchy .
i liked your way of writing the story , you have a very special touch of presenting the scene , then telling the stoty in a very interesting and attractive way , i found this part so sweet ''She was probably the happiest girl in the world and Rahul was the luckiest to have her.'' , i liked the imagery in your story , also the end was great , it shows how she still sad and remembring her husband even after he died , i mean she didn't forget him and continue her life , but the opposite , and that prouves how much she loved him , and still love him .
in general , so great , sad story , keep it up
smile:-)

I very much enjoyed this piece. By enjoy, I mean that it broke my heart. I like this piece very much. Thank you for bringing it here.
On to the nitpicking:
I don't think that your presentation was very emotional. I think that it would be more emotional if her back story were explained in a series of flash backs. Then we could see her remembering everything and we could be more suspended before we learn of Rahul's death.
Also, why did you choose this style of presentation? The breaks in the middle of sentences, and the double spacing is distracting. I would advise compacting it to traditional paragraphs, otherwise label it as a poem.

Thank you so much for the beautiful, sad story.

Short but sweet. Well not sweet.... It's very beautiful. I like how in just a few lines you captured Aradhya's love for Rahul. You're a great writer. My heart broke for her with the call from Ram and her huge, gasping sobs. Loved it.

This piece is lovely. Very romantic and desperate. I like how you had the flashback in the middle in a different font, that makes it easier to tell the mood has changed as well as the setting. I did notice a few grammatical errors and things that should be proofread.Here they are.
Errors I noticed:
#1 . In the fifth line, in between the words happy and but should be a comma.
#2 . In the seventh line I believe "little drops of joys." should be "little drops of joy." because "drops" already makes the raindrops plural.
#3 .Also in the seventh line, "on her face- She hated it" "She" should not be capitalized.
#4 .In the eighth line, the last word "the" doesn't have to be there. It is unnecessary.
#5 .In the second line of the flashback, "her age till she" should be "her age, 'till she". "till" should either be "until" or " 'till".
#6 .There are a lot of hyphens in this short, maybe you should fix this.
#7 .In the fourth line of the flashback, it says "so did he". Do you mean he fell in love with her? Or that he fell in love with another man?
#8 .In the fifth line of the flashback, you might want to add "man" in between "luckiest" and "to". Just a thought.
#9 .In the tenth line of the flashback it says "she was tensed". This does not make much sense. You should say either "she tensed" or "she was very tense".
#10 .In the twelfth line "rahul" should be capitalized.
#11 . Also in the twelfth line, the last word, "it" should be "they" in order to be plural.
#12 .In the thirteenth line, "huge and scary" should be "huge, scary".
#13 . Also in the thirteenth line, "was" should be "were".
#14 . In the fifteenth line, "an" should be "the".
#15 . In the third to last line "Its" should be "It has been" or "It had been".
#16 .In the second to last line, in between "changed," and "she" there should be the word "and".
#17 . In the last line, next to "panes" should be a comma.

Sorry I'm so picky! I just hope that what I said will help you! Please don't be offended by the number of things to fix, they're all tiny and mostly unnoticeable. Your work is very good, and I enjoyed reading it!
~Racket