The Broken Promise

Wow. This poem is brilliant! I love how it starts out peaceful, happy even with:

"Happiness in the air,

Celebrations aloud"

and how it quickly takes a turn for the dark... just wow. It gave me chills. But the best line in my opinion was

"You killed me with your words"

It really makes a powerful statement about how words, while they have the ability to bring about goodness (i.e. a promise) they also have a potential for destruction.

All in all, very well thought out and precisely written. I hope you write more poetry similar to this. I'm very impressed.

I love this part of your poem

"But I sit here numb,

Tears have dried up,

Fears have lost its charm,

My heart still mourns over the loss,

About the day my hopes and dreams went for a toss,

Didn’t I love you with all I had?

But,

You chose to leave me behind and move on,

You chose to break your promise,"

As I read it i then understood what you where saying and I know that love can heart but it does not matter because at least your falling in love or trying to find something that you can say is yours and no matter heart broken or not it's the love you have that matters

You say that you're not much of a poet, but you did really well with this. I really liked this line :

'Thinking of you and your unkept promise.'

That line is really good, since it's basically the title of the poem, and what the poem really is about. Also, this part was really good.

'Didn’t I love you with all I had?

But,

You chose to leave me behind and move on,'

The pain of having only you giving out love in the relationship was expressed really well, and I could understand the pain this person is going through. So yeah, this was a great poem. Continue writing poems like these, I'll keep reading.

Well done! I must say you have done well, especially seeing as this is your first poem. This poem's main strength is in it's rhythm. It is steady and consistent, except for the points where you wish to grab the readers attention. The last line, " thinking of you and your unkept promise." is by far your best. It introduces the meaning of the title, and sums up the poem.
Hope this helps,
Take That You Fiend!

hi there
so , first i wanna say that your work is amazing , it's touchy , meaningful.
and that you should keep writing poems , cause you're good in that .
1-i liked the starting of your poem very much :

"Cold winds adorn the beautiful winter mornings,
Happiness in the air,
Celebrations aloud,
But I sit here numb,

especially the first sentence , i mean lots of writers start their poems with descriptions , but they don't know how to make it attractive . but your beginning is great ,but i think that you need to write a catchy end , maybe using the same way that you start your poem with , with some imagery , yeah , it wil add a beautiful touch to your poem .

2-this line didn't work for me , it didn't flows good :

"Pretending, pretending, pretending, "

for me you did a good job , writing poems is hard , and need practise , and if you keep writing , you'll be a skilful poet .
so keep it up

smile

Dear Krishnathulasi,
I really enjoyed your poem. I think it is really nice. I think you should continue writing more poems because you definitely possess some talent.