Herp the derp,
yes that is all
One more thing Herp is for the derp
^_^
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Derp. Heehee- It's such a funny word. Derp.
*grins creepily, then disappears in a dramatic smoke bomb*
Hello, Knight NightWolf here to review.
Thanks for this little poem. It honestly made me smile, especially since I've had a bit of a bad day.
It's short, and sweet. I love its simplicity and how it goes full circle. Forgive me if I'm wrong, but is the reason its simple is because Herp is a derp?
This poem is original and creative. There might not even be a point to it, but the reason its so fun is because we try to find one.
My only niggle is the bye part at the end. If you took it away, then that would make the poem seem more professional.
See you,
- NightWolf
Sorry about you having a bad day but thanks for the review, I'm happy it made you smile it was just randomness all together ^__^
No problem, randomness is the very essence of writing!
Well hello! I'm just going to jump onto the review with pros and cons...
Pros;
1.) It's nice to see a humor poem here and there, they are a fun way to smile.
2.) It's pointless and cute because it makes no sense in ways, yet our mind seeks to make sense of it.
3.) Humor comes in many ways and I like to see in what ways do people find humor.
Cons;
1.) The emoticon and multiple explanation marks totally took away from the words.
2.) You kind of rephrase the first line in the third line.
3.) If you change the last line, I actually think this poem could have a lot more potential.
4.) You don't have to take this advice, but if you were to make it rhyme, it might flow a little better. But if you edit some words, rhyming isn't necessary.
I hope this helps!
Sincerely,
SecreteJournalist
AKA
Brie
... Thanks....
AKA
Sara XD