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Hey there, friend! Ellie stopping by with a quick review for this lovely piece of yours! Let's jump right in:

Humans are vile creatures. They lie, cheat, steal, do whatever they can that is best for them. And so, as many people seem to do in this chaotic whirlwind of a book, they stray away from their own kind.

Our story starts with the least terrified character of all.

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Hi! I'm Kate and I'm here to leave a quick review!!

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Humans are vile creatures. They lie, cheat, steal, do whatever they can that is best for them. And so, as many people seem to do in this chaotic whirlwind of a book, they stray away from their own kind. They run away from the cities, which once were good for the economy. They destroy their homes, which once held food and cherished memories. And they hide, in places which were once full of joy. That is how any good story starts. With the humans, seemingly in terror.

Our story starts with the least terrified character of all.

“Ruby!” a boy yelled, searching through his bedroom. The little dog had left a trail of red, muddy fur, but Silas could not seem to find her. A part of him was nervous that perhaps she had been eaten by the neighbours, but that seemed impossible. The neighbours still had a cat that they refused to eat.

The boy found the small red dog hiding under his bed, trembling. “There you are, sweet little Ruby!” He cradled her in his arms, patting bher head. He knew why she was so terrified of him.

On the balcony was a boiling pot of water sitting over a campfire.

Hi there, I’m here to leave a quick review.

Thanks for sharing this, I really enjoyed reading it. It reads like a good intro for a longer story. One thing I love about the story is how you openly tell the reader what is going to happen at the first sentence: “Humans are vile creatures.” Nonetheless, I still found myself surprised when I got to the end of the story.

As the reader, I felt led astray when the narrator described the boy’s worry that the neighbors might have eaten the dog. Since even the neighbors refused to eat their own pet, it was more of a shock to find that the protagonist of our story was the one willing to eat their own pet. The contrast of Silas calling Ruby his “sweet little Ruby,” right before implying that he will be eating his dog really hammers home the claim in the beginning of the story.

Overall, great work. I look forward to read more about Silas!

Hey, foxmaster here for a review!

(I'm taggin' @Rose here because this her amazing banner)
What I know
so, this seems like the world after an apocalypse, where everybody eats their pets? I feel like the world-building here wasn't that powerful and I'm still pretty confused.
room for improvements
Here, the beginning part is a really rather long paragraph, while the other paragraphs here are really short, and it messes up the way of writing here, if you get what I mean.
Also, in the second- to last paragraph, you wrote bher in stead of her.
what I like about this
Okay, let me say that the ending completely shocked me, really. I wasn't really expecting it, even though you spoke about the neighbors that ate animals, but I didn't really pay much attention to it. This story was the definition of short and sweet.... without actually being sweet, if you get what I mean.
overall
overall, this was a powerful, dark piece, and I greatly enjoyed it, and look forward to reading more of your work.
happy writing,
-Foxmaster

Greetings Storyteller,

Beyond my beloved horizon, I'm setting sail into uncharted pages with an itch for adventure. Through binoculars, I spy with my little eye a compelling story titled “The Apocalyptic Events of Fearlessness” that deserves a good review. So without further ado, let’s begin.



I. It all begins at the beginning
Your work radiates a sense of upcoming chaos, doom and transformation. The compelling start of the story immediately draws the reader in, creating a chilling and engaging atmosphere. I must say, you used a good title, a bit too long, but it does explain the whole situation without giving much away.
Themes of fear, human nature and survival are introduced. It has been proven that people will do anything, and almost anything to survive.

II. The Door to Improvement
If you ever write a sequel, which I really hope, you could consider focusing on the character development of the main character. Additionally, expand on the world-building by providing more details about the apocalyptic setting.
Definitely add plot twists and moral dilemmas, these will add to the layer of tension of the story.
These suggestions are offered with the intention of boosting the story’s depth and impact, so I hope they are helpful.

III. When All is Said and Done
The story offers a promising beginning to what could be an engaging and thought-provoking series. With its captivating start, chilling moments, and a world filled with potential, there is much to look forward to in the sequel. I hope you continue it.

That's it, that's all.
Hoping the review has been of value to you!

Yours in Puzzling Shadows,
Rose

Salutations, curious mind!