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Meadow's Aster: Chapter One: The Lepidopteran's Law

by gruzinkerbell


At the age of two weeks old, I was able to revel in the fact that all but three of my brothers were gone. Two had met their fate in the chrysalis, and one had met my deadly claws. Unlike the honeybees who work in delicate harmony, I was left at birth to fend for myself, and if I was meant to fend for myself, I would make sure it was done completely and utterly alone.

My sister stared at me in horror as my brother’s legs came to a slow mid-air, knees bending in the wind. The leaves rustled gently, and sweet, dewy liquid poured from the bulbs of the milkweed we sat on. It was a beautiful day.

“Aster,” she whispered. I could see the pain on her face as she hopped towards me on her fragile legs. She stuck out her tongue and licked our brother’s eye. It had turned dry as he became lifeless in the sun. “How could you do such a thing?”

“Why are you acting so concerned, Lantana?” I asked. “He was lazy; he was unable to find a mate, and he refused to explore other gardens. If I had let him in, some foolish little insect from the south would have come and fallen in love with him, and then there would be nearly twice as many larvae here than there are already.”

“But it isn’t your decision who lives and dies in this garden.” Lantana held her head high and stared at me coldly. “If you can’t get your act together by this evening, the rabble might kick you out.”

“And I’d be glad to live a life without hundreds of you constantly watching me.”

In truth, I had always feared the rabble. Anyone who headed south never came back south. Most of us only lived a few weeks, but my sisters and I had been lucky enough to survive the spring and the summer. It had allowed us more time to see who survived- and those who went south never did.

Lantana’s wings began to flutter as she stepped away from me, probably about to go tattle to one of the elders, no doubt.

“I have some preparations to make,” she sighed. “The Coleoptera are preparing a feast in our honor. You should come.”

“Please,” I laughed. “I would never associate with those hard-headed idiots.”

Lantana rolled her eyes, though I could see she was hiding her pain. She was the only one of our cluster I had let survive. She was hideous- asymmetrical wings and one antennae larger than the other- and was never a threat to my finding a mate. She was pure-hearted and never intended to find a mate of her own- at least not from the garden. She was good company, but terribly devout at acting like my conscience.

“Wait,” I called. Lantana’s head swiveled as she looked at me suspiciously. I coiled my tongue around her leg and pulled her back down beside me.

“What do you want?” she hissed. “I have to be on the other side of the garden in ten minutes.”

“I just…” I took a breath. “I need to tell you something. Before you go.”

Lantana’s eyes grew larger with curiosity, and a hint of pity. It was perfect.

“What is it, Aster?”

I pulled her closer and looked into her eyes.

Sorry.”

I held up my leg, covered in claws, and ripped her open. Lantana’s eyes dilated with panic, her breathing becoming heavier. It was safe to say that she was delicious.

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“Meadow’s Aster, of the tenth cluster and of Allium’s rabble, we beckon you to the Elder’s Hollow to face trial for unnecessary murder.”

“If I can, Great Vixen, I would like to request that I report to you alone, and not the Elders.”

The Great Vixen tilted her head at me. Her glowing, auburn fur showed brighter than a wildfire, and her teeth were clenched as she tried not to growl at me. Her lip remained in a permanent curl from a scar that had split it in two.

“I call for the Elders!” a young lacewing yelled. “I call for justice!” A few of its brethren piped in, the beetles nodding their heads and birds singing in the trees. The Meadow Swarm- my own kin, born of different clusters- stared at me coldly, but was unable to look me in the eye. I was the only reason they had a chance at being exiled from the garden and the sole reason they panicked every time a male was born. I had hated my brothers from the beginning, and any male of my kin I detested- the males only ever left us, and when they didn’t leave, they lived off of the hard work the other pollinators put in.

“May I ask why you request the Elders not take part in your trial?”

I looked up into the Great Vixen’s dark eyes. “Because I will only tell the truth when you and I are alone.”

“And in any other case than that, you will lie under oath?”

“I will lie until you force me onto my deathbed and you make me beg for mercy.”

Quiet gasps filled the hollow. Birds’ feathers ruffled in the trees. I could see the circle around me grow larger as Meadow, the lacewings, and the Coleoptera drew away from me. The Great Vixen kneaded her paws before nodding.

“Very well.” She turned to a weeping willow tree, its trunk thick but hollowed, and yipped at it until a few insects came out, all the same size as me. She beckoned them to sit at her feet and commanded them to keep track of the crowd until she reappeared. We both made our way into the hollow and sat on her bed of moss.

“Meadow’s Aster,” she hissed, her gaze cold and dark. “I ought to kill you here and now.”

“I’d like to warn you that I taste terrible,” I countered.

“Then why kill two of your brethren in one day?” The fox sighed and shook her head. “The Second Law of the Lepidoptera is that ‘murder is outright forbidden once a butterfly or moth has emerged from her pupa.’ You, however, seem to think that murder is some twisted sort of game.”

“May I remind you that you are a carnivore, Great Vixen? Your entire life depends upon the killing of others.”

“I have never killed anyone in the Garden. I protect the garden from the rabbits, and the humans dare not come near me. I have contributed wholeheartedly to all of you. But you, Meadow’s Aster, would rather take away than give.”

“My brother took away from all of the Meadows!” I yelled. “He never helped me and my sisters pollinate. He just sat like a hog on the milkweed plant and let it drip into his mouth. He was a glutton.” I held my head high and fluttered upwards to meet the Great Vixen’s gaze. “I did a favor to Meadows and all of the Garden by getting rid of him.”

“You did nothing to Meadows except give them pain and fear.” The Great Vixen took a breath. “Your brother’s and sister’s deaths are a tragedy, no matter how much you try and justify it. I have no choice but to exile you. You must find a new rabble to travel south with.”

I tapped my feet with naive excitement as the Great Vixen led me out of her den. “What a miracle. I never wanted to be part of the rabble anyways.”

The Vixen looked at me worriedly. She sat down on her throne. “Don’t you know why you must leave with the rabble, Aster?”

I cocked my head. “No. Why?”

The Great Vixen sighed. “I suppose you’ll learn in time.”

I sat on the Great Vixen’s shoulder as she yipped, drawing the attention of thousands of eyes in below and above me. The birds and bugs came to a quiet as they stared at me with unfathomable rage.

‘Meadow’s Aster, who has been put to trial for the murders of Meadow’s Lantana and Meadow’s Bergamot, cannot be upheld by the Law of the Lepidoptera, Coleoptera, Hymenoptera, Diptera, Hemiptera, and Passerine, and by the Order of The Fox.” The Great Vixen panted before taking a breath and speaking again. “Therefore, Meadow’s Aster is exiled to The Greenwood and cannot take part with her rabble’s migration.”

Cheering slowly built up as everyone grew excited about my demise. I was just as excited as they were; I would never have to see my Meadow kin again, and I would be able to live in the forest alone, indicated by the laws of all of the insects and birds, finally able to work on my own terms. Summer and spring always went by quickly, and I could feel it in my exoskeleton that winter would as well.

The Great Vixen gave me a wicked smile as she took her claw and ripped my wing. I held my tongue tightly, ignoring the pain that seared through my thin flesh. If this was what it took to be alone, it surely could have been worse.

“The traitor has been marked to show her treachery,” the Great Vixen announced as she let me go, “and can live in The Greenwood only with a life of guilt. She is forbidden from returning to the Garden, hunting down her rabble, and mating with anyone from the Garden.”

The cheers grew louder.

The Great Vixen gestured towards her shoulder, which I rested on with kindness. It was the last kindness I would ever see from her or the Garden. But I knew she was forced into that kindness unless she wanted an army of poisonous insects and sharp-beaked birds heading her way.

The fox and I walked through the crowd, her fur gently brushing the stems of the flowers and bushes. For as long as I could remember, I had never seen anything with thorns in the Garden except for roses. It was a weak and gentle place, its only defense a fox, which it had bowed under. Soon, I would be free from it.

I pushed away my pain and forced myself to fly so I could taste all of the different pollen for the last time. Poppies filled the air with their sweet aroma until it slowly mixed with other flowers, creating a type of scent I had only ever smelled from a human that had once strayed by, who had reeked of perfume. The Great Vixen quickly scared her off with a bite, and we had never had to deal with anything like that since. I landed on an unkempt hydrangea bush and flinched at the strong taste of the flowers, but happy I was able to find some pollen to spread. I drank a few drops of nectar before heading back to the fox.

The Great Vixen had already stopped in front of the cobblestone gates, her gaze studying each vine of ivy precisely. From what anyone knew, it was said that The Great Vixen hadn’t left the Garden in years unless she strayed to find herself food close by. But everyone’s word seemed frivolous, as no one had lived long enough to tell the tale except the birds.

The fox’s eyes grew weary as she peered at the trees above, a few songbirds studying me before I left. I could tell that the fox was filled with wanderlust. I wondered how many different forests she had traveled and how many rivers she had crossed before settling in my old home.

She used her strong muzzle to open the gate, an old trail from humans long ago guiding through the forest. Fireflies began to appear as the sun set farther below the trees. All of the trees were filled with lush leaves, but in a few months, they would be as thin and dreary as my own body.

“You miss it?” I asked. “Don’t you?”

The Great Vixen looked at me with a forced smile. “The Greenwood was a different kind of life than the Garden, but it wasn’t any better. I’m as happy here as I was then.”

“Liar!” I hissed. “I can see how you look out at it. Why don’t you come with me?”

“Because unlike you, I care about my duties.” She sighed and took a breath. “Besides, I’m too old. The Garden is safe, and no foxes or dogs ever try to come near it. I don’t have it left in me to fight a youthful fox, and I think it’s too late for me to find a mate.”

“Why?” I asked. “For a fox, I don’t think you’re that ugly.”

The Great Vixen softly chuckled. “I’m the only fox you’ve ever seen.”

“Look!” a cardinal called. A few birds and butterflies gathered around it and looked at us from above. “The Great Vixen is befriending the traitor!”

“I have done no such thing!” the Great Vixen snapped. She bared her teeth before looking at me again. I could see the sadness in her eyes, which reflected in mine. “Leave, Traitor. Before I kill you myself.”

Her words weren’t harsh. In fact, they sounded loving. I could tell that even after our short conversation, she wanted to go with me. She wanted to wander as I did, to be free from everyone and everything. But her time had passed, and it was now my turn.

I gave her a soft look before fluttering through the gate, fireflies guiding my path.

I had never had a friend before. But suddenly, I felt like I was losing the only one I had ever made.


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Before anyone askes, NO, there is NOT about to be a romance between a fox and a butterfly.




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OMG. A story featuring a sociopathic butterfly murderess? XD

Like... is it even possible for a butterfly to murder? Do they have any way to kill each other? That part confused me a bit because, as far as I know, butterflies aren't really built to be predators. They have no stingers or anyway to really bite. They just... flutter. And it's easy enough to flutter away from a butterfly? So this part was kind of confusing. I'm tempted to suggest maybe changing this to a dragonfly, perhaps? Still, I'll suspend disbelief for the moment. XD

I have to say... I am not very sympathetic toward the narrator, HOWEVER. I want to see her get her just desserts. Like, this whole line:

The Vixen looked at me worriedly. She sat down on her throne. “Don’t you know why you must leave with the rabble, Aster?”

I cocked my head. “No. Why?”

The Great Vixen sighed. “I suppose you’ll learn in time.”


...made me wonder, "Wait, why must you leave with the rabble?" It is such an ominous line, especially since the Great Vixen doesn't really explain herself. Not only that, but she almost seems sympathetic to this sociopathic butterfly, which makes me wonder, how bad is it going to be??

(Honestly, I hope it's bad... Lantana is my favorite character so far and she just WAS MURDERED by Aster, so yeah. BOOOOOO ASTER! Let's see you go DOWN like you deserve! Mwhahahahah!)

...okay, I know I am totally against Aster, but I also want to let you know that I am intrigued by what's going on. If you ever write a second chapter and post it, let me know. :)




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Hi gruzinkerbell! Happy Review Day!

Her glowing, auburn fur showed brighter than a wildfire


I believe you mean shone brighter?

Birds’ feathers ruffled in the trees.


This is just a suggestion but "birds' feathers" sounds clunky to me. I think you would benefit more from rewriting that line and describing it in a different way, such as "A loud ruffling sound came from the trees above as the birds waved their wings frantically" or something similar.

Your brother’s and sister’s deaths are a tragedy


Change this to say "Your brother and sister's"

I had hated my brothers from the beginning, and any male of my kin I detested


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Okay, so! I must say, this is such an interesting story. I have never read something like this before, where the story is from the perspective of an insect. I really do enjoy stories that involve the personification of animals and other non-human creatures, so this is really interesting to me. I find it fascinating that Aster already has such depth and has displayed a range of emotions -- from hatred and anger to happiness and glee. It's amusing to see Aster's inner monologue and how she feels about her kin and the rabble in general.

I love the pacing of this story so far. You are doing a great job of taking us through the events that led up to the trial, the trial itself, and the aftermath. You are using some complex terminology, such as terms like Lepidopterans and Coleoptera, but you are doing it sparingly and in a way that is easy for the reader to digest. We are clearly able to tell that these are classifications for the insects in the rabble.

In addition to that, I am also enjoying the use of imagery and the descriptions that you are providing as the chapter progresses. Rather than just tell us that Aster did not like her siblings, you showed us by describing the visceral feelings she felt and her decision to finally kill Lantana. Then, you showed us her lack of remorse in the way that she was apathetic during her trial and didn't even try to defend herself or prove her innocence. Once she was given what she wanted, however, the reader could see how quickly she came back to life and was overjoyed by this outcome.

The ending was well-done and definitely leaves the reader looking forward to seeing what happens next. I am curious to see exactly what The Great Vixen had in mind when she told Aster that she "would learn in time" (although I have a vague guess as to what it could mean). Please let me know if/when you post the next chapter, if you haven't already done so, as I would love to read and review it!

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Hey gruzinkerbell,

Happy Review Day and much Schadenfreude and Fahrvergnügen to you and yours! It's been well over a year since I've stretched my reviewing muscles but this one piqued my interest, so I'll do my best to give you some helpful feedback first line-by-line then a general summary at the end. Let's get started!

Unlike the honeybees who work in delicate harmony, I was left at birth to fend for myself, and if I was meant to fend for myself, I would make sure it was done completely and utterly alone.


This is a very powerful sentence. The "if I was meant to fend for myself, I would make sure it was done completely and utterly alone" was a really impactful, chilling statement and already gives a clue as to the personality of the MC by the end of the first paragraph. I can appreciate how difficult it is to write a good hook, and am thoroughly impressed with your ability to do it so well. I'm intrigued and looking forward to reading more!

Anyone who headed south never came back south.


Pretty sure you're missing a word or two here. I read it several times trying to understand how those who headed south couldn't come back south. Do you mean never came back from the south?

I held up my leg, covered in claws, and ripped her open.


(O).(o) Well, now... that escalated quickly. I'm not quite sure what I was expecting, but it wasn't that. And yet, at the same time, I really enjoy that you subverted my expectations. I tend to figure out where things are going and therefore it is rare a plot twist takes me off guard, so it's always a delightful treat when I get one that completely surprises me. Well done!

“Then why kill two of your brethren in one day?” The fox sighed and shook her head. “The Second Law of the Lepidoptera is that ‘murder is outright forbidden once a butterfly or moth has emerged from her pupa.’ You, however, seem to think that murder is some twisted sort of game.”


This is a really interesting plot point! And also raises a fair bit of questions. I am a biologist and recognized Lepidoptera as the butterflies and moths and was a little confused about the claws on his legs that allowed him to disembowel his sister. But this statement makes the intrigue even stronger. What's with the murderous butterfly? Are all butterflies murderous by nature, to the point the had to be outright forbidden?

“The traitor has been marked to show her treachery,” the Great Vixen announced as she let me go, “and can live in The Greenwood only with a life of guilt. She is forbidden from returning to the Garden, hunting down her rabble, and mating with anyone from the Garden.”


And my expectations were subverted once again as I realize I made gender assumptions but as it turns out it's a female murderous butterfly lol

But everyone’s word seemed frivolous, as no one had lived long enough to tell the tale except the birds.


This makes sense, given insect lifecycles, but does make me wonder why they bother to have laws and a whole court system with "elders" and everything if they only live for a few days to weeks anyway.

I had never had a friend before. But suddenly, I felt like I was losing the only one I had ever made.


omg TRAGIC sentence followed by one that was even more tragic than the one before it.

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Ahhh this cliffhanger you left us on! I went to your profile to look to see if you have a chapter two posted and don't see one, and that's a tragedy ;-; I am absolutely invested in this story with the sociopath butterfly and what is going to come of her exile. It screams of foreshadowing of an unfriendly run-in with a prettier fox that is probably going to go worse for her.

As I mentioned throughout, I really enjoy that you were able to make turns in this story that were unexpected and kept things fresh and exciting, while also not seeming jarring in a bad way. More of a "wait, what?" sort of way.

I do have some standing questions, like why Aster killed her siblings and seems completely unbothered by it. And also some of the social hierarchies going on here with the laws of the different orders. I generally am not the type of person who particularly enjoys cognizant animal stories but you brought enough science into this that it enticed and delighted my biologist brain and then weaved this story together in a way that made my writer brain happy.

Genuinely excellent story that I tore through and am thoroughly saddened that there's not a chapter 2 for me to find out how Aster's exile goes. Could you let me know if you end up posting the next installment of this piece eventually?

Keep writing!
Shady




gruzinkerbell says...


I'll definitely write a chapter 2 sometime! I'm so glad you enjoyed it :D




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