This is the prologue to the book I'm writing this summer. Sorry if it's a bit rough. Enjoy!!!
The packet came for a Mr. John Luis one quiet Kansas morning at the end of August. It concerned news of the TMC advanced musical group, which had recently completed another cycle of the competitive band. He did not care for reading about the success of the students of other teachers; he was concerned only with the last page in the packet: the audition form for the next year’s Nation Wide Band.
Merit. Honor. Supreme bragging rights. These things and numerous others represented the privilege to participate in the Titanic Musician’s Corps of the U.S.A. Funded by the prestigious Pre-Professional Musicians Association, the TMC brought together the finest high school musicians from around the nation to play together in an ensemble that directors envied. At the core of it, the TMC was just a summer band camp, but the competition posed as fierce, the pieces presented as Herculean challenges, and every serious band geek in America wanted in.
To those not in the band, a nation wide band composed of dorky high schoolers does not seem glamorous, but to those who it concerned, it was the opportunity of a lifetime. Ten weeks of intensive music training prepared the students to be nearly-professional musicians, and college representatives practically lined up at each students doorstep with a school to sell and scholarships to give. To aspiring musicians, a chance to jump-start their career could not be passed up.
Unfortunately, the majority of the applicants never received the recognition as among the best in the nation, even though they were the best in their respective states. Out of over 8,000 applicants, only 160 were admitted into the wind ensemble each year. The Audition Committee had to choose those 160 musicians by splitting hairs, but the end result was a gathering of the prime of America’s musical youth.
Because of the massive number of applicants, the Audition Committee constructed a way to narrow down the applicants as quickly as possible. Each person who auditioned had to send in three tapes: one of the requested solo, another of a requested cadenza, and a third piece of their choice that was under five minutes. The first solo was a mere eight measures long. During this part, about forty percent of the students were denied admittance to the program. The cadenza was difficult, as well, and tone and speed were necessary to play it. It was a page long, but the students only had twenty five seconds to play it. It did not seem fair, but the Committee needed to narrow down the students fast. There was no reconsidering a first impression. After the cadenza audition, there were 1000 musicians to judge a third time. This part of the auditioning took the longest, for at this level of advancement, every student seemed to be on the same caliber. The process was no longer weeding people out of the program as it was hand-picking those who would proceed.
The program itself was simple, compared to the grueling audition process. Students flew into New York City on Memorial Day weekend and settled in Julliard College. The first seven weeks were spent in intense rehearsals, private lessons, and theory classes. The next two weeks were spent in Europe, flaunting the best of America’s youth. The last week was spent in the States, on a concert tour of the east coast. This program was not for the weak at heart; no ordinary band geek could get in.
Even though the odds were daunting, tapes came flying in from around the country. Practically every band director, music professor, and private instructor knew of the program, and every year they encouraged their most prized students to enter. Mr. Luis, after reflecting on the competitive nature of the program decided that this year, he would enter one of his students: Astra Stavros. A soft-spoken trombone player, Astra did not qualify to audition her freshman year. But as a sophomore, and a talented low brass musician, Mr. Luis thought that she stood a fighting chance for this once-in-a-lifetime opportunity.
She was not thrilled to audition (as she was not thrilled to do any type of performance), but sent in her three tapes to humor her teacher. With no expectations of making the band, she forgot about its existence entirely. So, one can imagine the nonchalant manner she posed when she received a letter from the Pre-Professional Musicians Association in late January.
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Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm Knight Hardy here on a mission to ensure that all works on YWS has at least two reviews. You will probably never see this but....Imma do this anyway.
First Impression: So this was a really simple little prologue piece here and it was actually quite nice. There was definitely some really cool stuff that you set up here and then that simple statement there to end things. It all ties the whole thing together really well and sets up what sounds like it will be a really great story.
Anyway let's get right to it,
Well that is definitely a pretty neat little way to start things off. Not sure if that bit of information on the newspaper is going to be important but the fact that you mention his motive right there at the start is really nice to see.
Well that certainly does sound like a really nice little commercial for this event and it does actually manage to tell us some pretty nice stuff about what this whole thing is and why this person would want to be a part of it.
Some more great descriptions to really get a sense for what this whole thing is about and that is again nice to see.
That does sound like a pretty grueling procedure that is necessary as well. Good job coming up with that whole thing.
Well that sounds like our setup for the story and that's pretty nice. Definitely a good thing to be a part of a prologue.
I love the point at which you chose to end this. It's definitely telling us all we need to know about where the story is set up and what happens while also really building up the suspense as to what will end up happening next.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
Overall: Overall this works quite well as a prologue. It definitely does a really good job establishing this world, the whole premise and then that little hook there with the letter so that we keep on reading to see what happens after that. Great Job!!
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry